[Jane99]

HI:)

I found this peace of song today i think i wrote it like half a year ago or so and i don't know how to continue this. I hope you can help me
I wrote this after i went to a record label and gave them a self made demo cd and asked for a record deal and they said no and this no was ok but what does it mean? is it like my songs are too bad, i'm too young... hope you understand what i mean

Lyrics:

Hi i’m 14 been writing songs for a few years now
I have this dream and you’re the key for making it true
but you said no
and hey no is good but
should i keep trying should i not
is it my age oh what is it oh please

tell me something not just no
give me a reason not just no
it’s too bad not just no
tell me something not just no

[onemanband]

Hey Jane -

A few thoughts on where you could go with the lyrics -

I think a verse where you almost plead with them, telling them why you want it so bad.

Another verse, where you fantasise about what it would have been like if they said YES!

A bridge where you resign yourself to their answer

and then a verse where you vow to prove them wrong/ or  a repeat of the chorus where it goes like this

tell me something not just no
give me a reason not just no
it’s too bad not just no
tell me something, tell me yes..

and end.

I realise I haven't done the hard part of coming up with the lyrics, but some ideas for you to consider in terms of structuring the song.

I like the concept - I have just written a song along a similiar theme 

Good luck!!

[Jane99]

WOW you hepled me alot! Thank you!