Hi, I'm new to the forum and looking for some feedback on my tunes.
This one is called "Kevlar" and is about outwardly giving the impression that all is well and I'm a strong person dealing with a crushing life event, when in reality I'm a second away from cracking up. The trigger for this exposure of my true state is always a surprise, you never know it's coming.
I've never quite got the vocals right, this is the best I could do. I'd be interested in how I could improve the song.
https://soundcloud.com/steve-cardus/kevlarLyrics:
You know what? I’m invincible
nothing can pierce my armour
I’m bulletproof indestructible
nothing can do me wrong
my skin is my skin is strong like a kevlar
my skin is my skin is strong like a kevlar
my skin is my skin is strong like a kevlar shell
You know what? I’m invincible
nothing can pierce my armour
I’m bulletproof indestructible
nothing can do me wrong
my skin is my skin is strong like a kevlar
my skin is my skin is strong like a kevlar
my skin is my skin is strong like a kevlar shell
unexpected sometimes
things blow my mind
shatter the illusion
it takes one and I’m gone
it takes one and I’m gone
it takes one and I’m gone
it takes one and I’m gone
You know what? I’m invincible
nothing can pierce my armour
I’m bulletproof indestructible
nothing can do me harm
my skin is my skin is strong like a kevlar
my skin is my skin is strong like a kevlar
my skin is my skin is strong like a kevlar shell
You know what? I’m invincible
nothing can pierce my armour
I’m bulletproof indestructible
nothing can do me wrong
my skin is my skin is strong like a kevlar
my skin is my skin is strong like a kevlar
my skin is my skin is strong like a kevlar shell
unexpected sometimes
things blow my mind
and shatter the illusion
it takes one and I’m gone
it takes one and I’m gone
it takes one and I’m gone
it takes one and I’m gone
Thanks
Steng