[AnnaLina]

Hey guys, just wrote this song, I haven't come up with a definite melody yet but I imagine it being a sort of quiet/stripped down arrangement that builds up throughout the song, ending with a "choir" singing a long in a sort of gospel kind of vibe. If it makes any sense I imagine it as being a mixture of pop, rock and gospel- but all in the very subtle and sad kind of vibe. Let me know what you think, should I make any changes etc? Would really appreciate your feedback.


Today the sky is bleeding
I see it's raining blood
Everything lost meaning
So heaven's heart stopped

All of this hate
How did it get to you
Tell me what to say
I dont know what to do

I'm lost and I'm terrified
So tell me, how do you heal a bleeding sky?
How do you heal a bleeding sky?

Where do you start?
Their answer was revenge
It breaks my heart
cause now it never ends

Red clouds will stay
blood pouring down
So tell me what to say
just tell me how

I'm lost and I'm terrified
So tell me, how do you heal a bleeding sky?
How do you heal a bleeding sky?

Dont close your eyes now
It won't go away
look up at the sky now
It's your blood too

I'm lost and I'm terrified
So help me, how do you heal a bleeding sky?
How do you heal a bleeding sky?
I think it's time we try

[den]

it works pretty well as it is, but I suppose if you want to change anything, perhaps why is the sky bleeding, revenge for what, reaction on earth, what you have lost, the outcome.
but its a simple lyric saying everything as it is, with a few little tweaks from comments on here im sure you will fine tune it into something we will all be looking out for.
regards den.

[hardtwistmusic]

I "got" everything about the lyric.  I don't think it needs more clarification.  But something is "not all that it could be" from my read.    I'll think about it and see if I can pin it down. 

It's soooooooo full of promise that you must set it to music.  And I'm not altogether sure that music isn't everything this lyric needs.  Again.... let me think on it and if I can pin it down in a way that helps, I'll get back to you. 

Beautifully fearful and sad sentiment, beautifully expressed.