[victorvillero]

Soundcloud: https://soundcloud.com/vikktor/untitled-ii

I wrote this song with a little bit of experimentation in mind. I tried to fuse alternative rock with a cool reggae sound in the verse. I only have the acoustic version since all my files were destroyed by the 2013 Typhoon.

This song gave me the opportunity to become a part of an annual Singing-Songwriting Camp here in the Philippines.

Feedbacks are always welcome and highly appreciated; feel free to give any. 


Verse
Rise above
Rise above, my lovely, native land
Open your eyes
to the predicament that lies at hand
Obstruction--freedom's demise

Pre-Chorus
When will we learn
to extend our judgment and move against the flow
When will we prevail to save the people from the people of the people?

Chorus
Actions speak louder than words

Verse
The thrills of a nation
lies beneath recurring situations
Blunders and word contraptions
And then a-foolin' us with their silly incantations

Pre-Chorus
When will we learn
to extend our judgment and move against the flow
It's not as if we can't think for our own sake
to be blind to our own mistake

Chorus
Actions speak louder than words

Chorus
Actions speak louder than words


A hundred million words can't quite make it

[mickeytwonames]

Like the guitar groove - but I think the words need to be for fierce and ferocious and the ending is a bit abrupt - just sayin'

[pompeyjazz]

Like the vibe victor. Would love to hear this with some more instruments but I get it. Maybe it could be shortened slightly but just a personal opinion. Good work.

Cheers

John

[KaelJay]

 I think their is a good message in this song. It needs to be more bolder though. The vocals and the instrumental should be louder and stronger, just like the words. And speaking of words, I think it's too 'wordy'. The lyrics is obscured and hard to understand to the normal listener. It (the words) should be more simpler.

I hope the feedback helps you!

Mikael

[CaliaMoko]

It's unfortunate your files were lost; I'd like to hear the "not acoustic" version. I like the feel of the song.

I think some work on the words could be beneficial; some of the words/phrasing feel awkward to me. Like "predicament", "Blunders and word contraptions", "silly incantations", "extend our judgment". But it might just be me, too, so don't worry about it unless you agree.

Overall, I enjoy the sound and I appreciate the message.

Vicki