This is a poem called “Quiet” about a character with the same name. While it could work as experimental rap, I think that I would like to present it in the classic industrial style of groups like “Throbbing Gristle” or “Consumer Electronics.”
I would like to see what you guys think it’s about, because ultimately, I’d want people to understand, or at least take something away from it in isolation without me needing to explain things.
I am quite sure that I am happy with most everything here, however, I wonder if it could be any shorter. If perhaps one verse is obsolete or could be merged with another one which perhaps lingers unnecessarily on the same point.
Quiet
Quiet!
You can’t afford to crack
So you can't afford to care
So you can't afford to feel
While your skin wears and peels
Your bared anatomy raw
Block the gore from your thoughts
And live your loopy life asleep
As a stumbling corpse
Quiet
You have got work, Quiet!
Don’t you love her, Quiet?
Then make her better, Quiet
Keep quiet now, Quiet!
Quiet kind one
Your mother raised a blind son
Well mannered and then some
Little too much patience
You're cruelly fucked for kindness
Bent over and ass ripped
Rapists have their needs too
Shouldn't be denied to you
Introspection makes you hate
Yourself to only give and never take
A Narcissist takes till you break
Then paints the guilt within your face
You’ll cut yourself for her mistakes
Lashing out in slavery state
Nigger better know your place
What is right she will dictate
Quiet, you're like all the exes
Quiet, you're the fuckin' bestest
She's the fuckin' best kiss
Quiet, you're so blessed, kid!
But Quiet is loud and frightening
With his possessiveness tightening
She was only cheating
Quiet needs a gas enlightening
Don’t you ever fuckin' doubt her!
Unless you do not love her
Where'd you be without her?
That loneliness was such hurt
Quiet, what the fuck you worth?
She's your first requited love
You don’t deserve a damn thing
From this cold unfeeling earth
Quiet, silent from abuse
It’s easier if you don’t refuse
Folks act like they hate you
So don’t cry and make them -hate- you!
But cut yourself and she'll cut herself
‘Cos you'll remind her of her hell
Wicked men trigger the girl
You're so selfish, needing help
Yes, she’s damaged, but that ends
There are things that can’t defend
So just how much can you excuse?
When if you're loosed she may be doomed!
You never use your fucking mouth
Unless you're helping someone out
While nakedly she drags you south
Nerves are keeping your head down
Is she to blame, is she empowered?
Or are you just a fucking coward!
Whose scared you’ll never love again
Loose your place, your life, your friends
Your self esteem is where this ends?
?Can’t you fucking comprehend
You've attained those things before!
Now take control and take the door
Quiet, I'm inside your head
Manifested thoughts inflated
Hate me and live on sedated
Be me and be free but hated!
Quiet, you are but an aspect
From a character detracted
I promise you’re allowed to hurt
You’re not alone, you have these words
At least your art isn’t quiet