[Schavuitje]

I've listened to this two nights in a row now to make sure I have a good listen 
First of all it's easy to hear this song means a lot to you in the vocals. Not just on that end bit either 
It's a well written song with lyrics that are really good and very sad.
You know before I say it that it's not my cuppa, but that doesn't stop me from appreciating it. 
To be truthful I actually enjoyed it much more when it was simple guitar and bass and the build
took some of that closeness and emotion away from me. I would have prefered for it to have stayed bass and guitar
the whole way through with maybe some really soft/gentle percussion rather than drums and organ.
Nice one though, good song 

[James Nighthawk]

Lovely writing as always fella

I am with schav here. I would most likely prefer a version without the drums and organ. The add nothing for me and lesson the impact of the vocal and the song as a whole

Great lyricism and nice tight guitar strumming. A delicate subject well handled. Thumbs up

[Kafla]

Lovely writing as always fella

I am with schav here. I would most likely prefer a version without the drums and organ. The add nothing for me and lesson the impact of the vocal and the song as a whole

Great lyricism and nice tight guitar strumming. A delicate subject well handled. Thumbs up

Many thanks for all your great comments and useful suggestions  

I completely understand Scahvu's and James point about the middle 8 , I even considered building up the last verse more on the back of this section

It's a hard one - I tried it acoustic all the way though and I personally thought the build up was a nice juxtaposition to the town , lives and country falling apart in this section

But there are never any rights and wrongs, only opinions and I am grateful for them all  

[flossie]

Hi Kaf

This is a great song and fantastic songwriting I really enjoyed it- I personally like the drums coming in there and dropping out again - just shows you, different people like different things! Your vocals are sounding really good too!

One of your best Kaf I think  - I wish I could write lyrics like you
xxx

[Boydie]

Loving the emotion you have captured here

I am afraid Alanis Morisette has ruined harmonica solos for me in songs so I was not a fan of that - but not your fault at all

I did actually like the drums kicking in - but I do think it is a tricky one as it sounded odd taking them out again - but then again I can see why you did

On balance I would agree with keeping them out altogether

This is a perfect example of songwriting being about capturing - and then getting across - emotion within the music and lyric

Just luurrvly

[vibesville]

Sometimes in life music and lyric is a great release for those moments in time you so want to express but never knew how,
they can seem to hard to deal with. Take comfort in knowing they would be proud of you.

The song says it all :)

Kirby

[Kafla]

Thank you all very much for your kind comments and observations

I am glad you like the lyrics Flossie - I don't think I am a master word smith but most of the time I achieve what I am trying to say in a song , lyrics mean a great deal to me 

[Pez]

Kafla this is really good. My wife used to have a mark owen solo album and your voice reminds me of that, there
were some great tracks on there thinkin back, i cant remember the name of it now... Vocal is really loud, I'd prob come down a bit on it to let the guitar through a tad more but still magical emotional track mate. I really like this.

[estreet]

Great song and the right treatment for it. I'm not a big fan of Dylanesque harmonica solos (even when Brooce does it, lol),  so I'll pass commenting on that. Drums were just right, but should have finished on a bass drum and decaying cymbal hit rather than a snare which sounded a bit abrupt. Also needed a bass guitar or sample of one as a bass drum always sounds odd without. Nice work mate.

[Kafla]

Thanks Pez and estreet !

You always explain things really well estreet , I knew it wasnt right coming off the mid 8 and now I know how to fix it 

[jmacdon]

Top form Andrew.   Dare I say, this reminds me very very much of Arlo Guthrie (I'm tooooo young to be into Woody Guthrie).   I love the subject matter - it's spot on - and I love the acoustic style.  Not really much to criticise to be honest.  I can see you playing this at the Stables in Wavendon (incidentally, thats where I saw Arlo) and it would go down a storm.

Your vocals are clear and well recorded (any tips you wanna share?!). 

My only criticism, I guess, is at 19s "understand what happened that day",  I think the "that day" falls on b flat.  It's pretty predictable and an obvious place to land on - b major would probably be too cheesy, but worth playing around to find a note that feels right and unique.

[ric]

Nice song - well sung & produced - balanced sound. It's a protest song, good on you! Very accomplished rhythm work on the guitar. Yes, that harp really sets me thinking about early Dylan - excellent!

[stephaniedema]

Hey Kafla!

Everytime I see you have a new song up, I know it's gonna be amazing, but still time and time again you surpass my expectations.
This song seriously brought tears to my eyes. The verse of 'little sister' in particular made me choke.
Good work, man!

SD

[Sellon]

Your accent is strong in this lol...thought i'd point that out..great as always, but I feel its lacking something, not sure what though, but apart from that, its good...I feel your lyrics are improving too man, which is good, and the harmonica gives it some uniqueness, it almost feels weird, but in a good way...nice job man.