I do actually quite like the track but I am confused by this sentence:
It is an edgy pop R&B song that was written to try and sound different to other commercial stuff and create a buzz
It really really isn't edgy and it is not different to other commercial stuff!?!?!
I am hearing lots of elements from other songs - specifically Madam Ga Ga
Now this is no bad thing at all but I think you are on dangerous ground if you are trying to circulate this as new and edgy
On to the song...
I like it a lot and it would fit in to a lot of current radio playlists perfectly
I would suggest a different video for the presentation - pop is not known for it's deep and meaningful lyrics and this track is no exception, which although I think is great for this type of track I think you would benefit from not featuring the lyrics as the main part of the video
I also found the track "dragged" in places so I would be tempted to up the BPM a bit - even if it is only in certain sections
The track was also lacking a proper bassline for me - I appreciate the phat kick is filling a lot of the low end and the synths are playing theor part but I think a bassline playing a bit of a counter rhythm to the other stuff could help add a bit of "drive"
I am loving the effects and I like the vocals
Overall I like the track but I do think there is a little more you could get out of it - although I would quite happily listen to this and will probably come back to it
Good luck with it