[becbec1987]

Hi all.... bit nervous this is the first time i have ever posted anything and i have been writing since i was 11!
I am a bit rusty i have had a serious case of writers block for the past 2 years but coming out of it,
Obviously you can see this song is personal but honesty is appreciated.
This song is currently untitled.
Thanks
 
Becky  xx

I know sometimes I can seem a little strange,
How I don’t tell you everything
Cos in a way I’m scared if I did id loose you,
You mean more to me than you will ever know
Just wrapped up in your arms,
Holding me tight and never letting me go.
I don’t want to scare you but there’s something I want to say.

You give me butterflies every time we talk
Send  my head in a spin everytime we touch
You have bought light into my dark dark world
Without you i wouldn’t know what it was like to fall in love.

I could stare into your eyes until forever
Hold you till this world ends and into the next
Never wanted love till we met
 when you don’t have it you forget
what its like to feel the warmth
The tenderness... the love.

You give me butterflies every time we talk
Send  my head in a spin everytime we touch
You have bought light into my dark dark world
Without you i wouldn’t know what it was like to fall in love.

I never loved but always lost
Never fought yet paid the cost
Always hiding
Running scared
Now I have you and im so unprepared

Cos..
You give me butterflies every time we talk
Send  my head in a spin everytime we touch
You have bought light into my dark dark world
Without you i wouldn’t know what it was like to fall in love.

[tone]

Hi Becky

Thanks for taking the plunge and posting your lyric   It's a very personal lyric which always makes it hard to critique because it's so personal to you, but these are my immediate thoughts.

Best line : Now I have you I'm so unprepared
Such a shame that the previous line is 'running scared' - there's nothing wrong with this phrase except that it's been used far too many times by others.  I also think it would be easy to change without losing any of the feel of the song.

The second line of the chorus doesn't quite sound right to me - 'send my head into a spin' makes more sense but I realise this may not fit with your phrasing and melody.

On the whole, very honest and raw, and brave.  Keep writing, and feel free to share any recordings you may have with us