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Songwriter Forum => Lyrics => Topic started by: Girlinside on June 01, 2019, 12:18:24 PM
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Please feel free to use and change
Moonlight
C/B I can see the moonlight
C/F over the hill
C/B I can feel the wind on my face
C/F that chills
C- I can see the birds
C/F as they sing my song
C- I can feel the pain
G- but don’t know what’s wrong
C/B The world can be
G-such an ugly place
C/F I wonder what they make
G- from outer space
C/F of this mixed up crazy
G - human race
G-I keep looking over the hills
C/B for light
C- but the world this moment
G -ain’t so bright
C/B I can see the moonlight
C/F over the hill
C/B I can feel the wind on my face
C/F that chills
C- I can see the moonlight
G- stars and sun
C/F as the darkness closes
C/B all around me
C-I can hear the waves
C/F of gentle seas
C-as my eyes close slowly
G- in the breeze
C- I can see the future
G - that I want
C/B on a train that
C/F might not stop
G-at my destination
C/B I can see the moonlight
C/F over the hill
C/B I can feel the wind on my face
C/F that chills
Fades
C- I can see the moonlight
G- stars and sun
C/F as the darkness closes
C- I can see the moonlight
G- stars and sun
C/F as the darkness closes
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I could see the images "painted" with words in this lyric. I do have suggestions for the verse about someone watching from space. It's the only verse that turns phrases around into unnatural orders, so I suggest trying to come up with something that works in a more natural order. Maybe something like....
Is someone watching us from outer (or "out in") space
thinking "what a mixed up human race"?
I kept the rhythm with strong and weak beats the same as you had them, but if there's wiggle room in the rhythm, you could probably come up with something better.
That's all I have. I do like the images of the lyric.
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Thanks I will take a look I’m practicing it but as I’ve only an iPad and iPhone recording isn’t very good
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I can write bucket loads of lyrics it’s just knowing what to do with them
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Girlinside just a thought, i don't know what these ass hole mustang are like but the wolf under moonlight plays jazz 8)
Moonlight
I can see the moonlight
over the hill
I can feel the wind my face
that chills
I can hear the birds
they sing their songs
I can feel their pain
don’t know ohaa sheashit, what’s wrong
This world can be
such an ugly place
I wonder what they see
from outer space
this mixed up crazyyie, human race
tell me baby, i'm I safe