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Songwriter Forum => Lyrics => Topic started by: Mr.Chainsaw on April 27, 2012, 04:16:01 PM
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Been a while since I posted anything. This one is super bleak for me. Don't worry about the line length, it makes sense when I play it!
Rhapsody
Why are you trying to talk to me?
I am vacant, or can't you see
Suffering, is that so hard to believe?
Can you take it all away, I don't mind
Serpents writhe, beneath my eyelids
Coil through my mind, hate on their lips
Shut me down, with merely a kiss
Can you take it all away, I don't mind
Take it all away, I don't mind
Just please don't abandon me
To the cloying embrace of a jet black rhapsody
There's knife wounds in my mind
Self inflicted, now those are the worse kind
Past failure has left me weak
Average listener, I just choose not to speak
No warmth now, I am utterly bleak
Can you take it all away, I don't mind
Waiting for a light to appear
Something precious that I can hold dear
Hope lies raped by the tyranny of fear
Can you take it all away I don't mind
Take it all away, I don't mind
Just please don't abandon me
To the cloying embrace of a jet black rhapsody
There's knife wounds in my mind
Self inflicted, now those are the worse
Self inflicted, now those are the worse
Self inflicted, now those are the worse
Self inflicted, now those are the worse
Self inflicted, now those are the worse kind
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super bleak .. :(
boy , so difficult to say anything ,,cos like you say you know it works with your music...
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*worst
Normally I wouldn't say anything about spelling but given that it's repeated so much the hard 't' is fairly imperative...
Aside from that, excellent song! Like STC said, very bleak, which shows you really know what you're aiming to get and getting it spot on.
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Predictive text, now those are the worst kind...
Peter
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this is sick, loving this, this give me influence for something im doing, keep em coming :D