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Songwriter Forum => Lyrics => Topic started by: Jackdaw on August 23, 2017, 02:50:51 PM
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The Face of Eleanor
Eleanor flies in by moonlight
She's captured the Dreams of your Heart
She's come a long way
And you want her to stay
Coz' she gives her love through the dark
You lie awake sleepin'
Your mind's in a stir
As nightfall comes creepin'
All your thinking of is Her
You've fallen for her lovin'
Like never before
You've fallen for her lovin'
And the Face of Eleanor
Long way to go yet with Eleanor me thinks?
Jackdaw1888 :-)
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ELEANOR - ' the bright shining one'
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Eleanor flies in by moonlight
She's captured the Dreams of your Heart
She's come a long way
And you want her to stay
Coz' she gives her love through the dark
You lie awake sleepin'
Your mind in a stir
As nightfall comes creepin'
All your thinking of is Her
You've fallen for her lovin'
Like you've never before
You've fallen for her lovin'
And the Face of Eleanor
Eleanor waits by the lakeside
She kisses you under Starlight
She gives you her hand
Then you walk over sands
And she gives you her love through the night
You know you are Dreamin'
But you don't really care
She gives you some meaning
And you see her everywhere
You've fallen for her lovin'
Like you've never before
You've fallen for her lovin'
And the Face of Eleanor
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My inspiration for these Lyrics came from seeing the Face of the actress Eleanor Tomlinson.
Jackdaw1888 :-)
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I absolutely adore these lyrics so I sent them to the Agent of Eleanor Tomlinson.
Jackdaw :-)
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I absolutely adore these lyrics so I sent them to the Agent of Eleanor Tomlinson.
Jackdaw :-)
Kinda got an Acknol via email re Eleanor.
Yippee!!!
Wit Woo!!!
Jackdaw1888 :-)
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I think I have just met the Eleanor that I have dreamt of and speak of in these lyrics today.
Purely by chance she waltzed into a business meeting.
The hand of fate works in mysterious ways at times me thinks :-)
Jackdaw1888
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Really, really compelling lyric. Sings well and naturally with little effort to find a tune even on a very quick one time read. I was literally singing by the third line of the first verse.
Well written, ready for music, and it SEEMS clear to me (I can be wrong, of course) that you have at least a cadence, if not a tune already set for it.
I really think this is a worthwhile and memorable lyric.
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Really, really compelling lyric. Sings well and naturally with little effort to find a tune even on a very quick one time read. I was literally singing by the third line of the first verse.
Well written, ready for music, and it SEEMS clear to me (I can be wrong, of course) that you have at least a cadence, if not a tune already set for it.
I really think this is a worthwhile and memorable lyric.
Many many thanks Verlon.
You are so kind.
And yes you are very astute... I do have music in my head for these lyrics I have written but alas I cannot play a chord!
I am but a mere Poet :-)
Regards
Jackdaw1888
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I will PM you Verlon with the kind of melody and music I would dearly love to hear my Lyrics to.
You yourself may remember the artist/song?
Jackdaw1888 :-)
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This song or its lyrics were actually written for a former lover.
Her face I will never see again.
Jackdaw1888 :-)
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Eleanor flies in by moonlight
She's captured the Dreams of your Heart
She's come a long way
And you want her to stay
Coz' she gives her love through the dark
You lie awake sleepin'
Your mind in a stir
As nightfall comes creepin'
All your thinking of is Her
You've fallen for her lovin'
Like you've never before
You've fallen for her lovin'
And the Face of Eleanor
Eleanor waits by the lakeside
She kisses you under Starlight
She gives you her hand
Then you walk over sands
And she gives you her love through the night
You know you are Dreamin'
But you don't really care
She gives you some meaning
And you see her everywhere
You've fallen for her lovin'
Like you've never before
You've fallen for her lovin'
And the Face of Eleanor
Eleanor leaves by the dawn light
She whispers her love then takes flight
When you wake in the morn
And a new day is born
All your wishing for is one more night.
You know you are Dreamin'
But you don't really care
She gives you some meaning
And you see her everywhere
You've fallen for her lovin'
Like you've never done before
You've fallen for her lovin'
And the Face of Eleanor
Jackdaw1888 :-)
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Eleanor flies in by moonlight
She's captured the Dreams of your Heart
She's come a long way
And you want her to stay
Coz' she gives her love through the dark
You lie awake sleepin'
Your mind in a stir
As nightfall comes creepin'
All your thinking of is Her
You've fallen for her lovin'
Like you've never before
You've fallen for her lovin'
And the Face of Eleanor
Eleanor waits by the lakeside
She kisses you under Starlight
She gives you her hand
Then you walk over sands
And she gives you her love through the night
You know you are Dreamin'
But you don't really care
She gives you some meaning
And you see her everywhere
You've fallen for her lovin'
Like you've never before
You've fallen for her lovin'
And the Face of Eleanor
Eleanor leaves by the dawn light
She whispers her love then takes flight
When you wake in the morn
And a new day is born
All your wishing for is one more night.
You know you are Dreamin'
But you don't really care
She gives you some meaning
And you see her everywhere
You've fallen for her lovin'
Like you've never done before
You've fallen for her lovin'
And the Face of Eleanor
Jackdaw1888 :-)
Hmmm?
I am thinking of doing another verse come a final end to this tale of a lover I once lost.
Ha Ha :-)
Jackdaw1888
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Aye...do another verse...
And don’t forget to drag your post back to the top again next week ::)
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Aye...do another verse...
And don’t forget to drag your post back to the top again next week ::)
Hmmm?
I appear to have struck a 'Chord'
I 'Note' a distinct hint of sarcasm/jealousy within the above posting.
Or maybe its just me 'Singing' from the wrong hymn sheet?
Jackdaw1888
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Silence???
Hmmm???
I will await mister Paul Ads reply till Doomsday if needs be.
But I will offer him a challenge...
Please write and then post FOUR songs okay?
My 4 songs have had over 5267 views and many many compliments along the way.
I now await yours?
Regards
Jackdaw1888 :-)
Remember...
A Shallow brook will oft' babble the Noisiest as they say?
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Actually my tally now is 5,288.
Which means that you have to get atleast 1,322 hits come views re your offerings of 4 lyrics/songs.
Can you do it?
Ha Ha ... Jackdaw1888 :-)
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Hello Jackdaw :)
You write good lyrics.
I'm not a particularly competitive person and that isn't why I visit the forum. I'm interested in writing and enjoying what others write.
I've probably written upwards of 20 songs in the two years or so I've been a member here...as well as quite a few lyrics...but I have no idea how many views they've had. Those songs and lyrics are all kicking around the forum if you want to read any of them.
best wishes
Paul
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Hello Jackdaw :)
You write good lyrics.
I'm not a particularly competitive person and that isn't why I visit the forum. I'm interested in writing and enjoying what others write.
I've probably written upwards of 20 songs in the two years or so I've been a member here...as well as quite a few lyrics...but I have no idea how many views they've had. Those songs and lyrics are all kicking around the forum if you want to read any of them.
best wishes
Paul
Best Wishes.
Kind Regards.
Good luck re your Lyrics matey.
Carl Anthony
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Cool 8)
Cheers!
Paul
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Hi Jackdaw
I'm composing music for your lyrics. I would like to add a middle 8 so do you think you could write a mid section after the 2nd chorus that breaks the format please?
Thanks
Andrew
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Hi Jackdaw
I'm composing music for your lyrics. I would like to add a middle 8 so do you think you could write a mid section after the 2nd chorus that breaks the format please?
Thanks
Andrew
Hiya Andrew.
And many many thanks for your interest and enthusiasm re my lyrics/words.
As for your request I will have a think and see what I can come up with ok?
However I may have to personally message you or email you as it has recently been 'suggested' that I myself merely post on here in efforts to 'bump' my songs up the ratings and keep them at the fore come top of the page???
Kind Regards
Jackdaw1888 :-)
Ps...
I will gladly send you my email address
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Hi Jackdaw
I'm composing music for your lyrics. I would like to add a middle 8 so do you think you could write a mid section after the 2nd chorus that breaks the format please?
Thanks
Andrew
Hiya Andrew.
And many many thanks for your interest and enthusiasm re my lyrics/words.
As for your request I will have a think and see what I can come up with ok?
However I may have to personally message you or email you as it has recently been 'suggested' that I myself merely post on here in efforts to 'bump' my songs up the ratings and keep them at the fore come top of the page???
Kind Regards
Jackdaw1888 :-)
Ps...
I will gladly send you my email address
Jack get over yourself will ya, Andrew composing music for your lyrics but already you're sounding like you dont give a ::)
Kind Regards whatever 8)
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Hi Jackdaw
I'm composing music for your lyrics. I would like to add a middle 8 so do you think you could write a mid section after the 2nd chorus that breaks the format please?
Thanks
Andrew
Hi Andrew.
I have decided to PM you re the above.
Cheers
Jackdaw1888 :-)
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Hi Jackdaw
I'm composing music for your lyrics. I would like to add a middle 8 so do you think you could write a mid section after the 2nd chorus that breaks the format please?
Thanks
Andrew
Hiya Andrew.
And many many thanks for your interest and enthusiasm re my lyrics/words.
As for your request I will have a think and see what I can come up with ok?
However I may have to personally message you or email you as it has recently been 'suggested' that I myself merely post on here in efforts to 'bump' my songs up the ratings and keep them at the fore come top of the page???
Kind Regards
Jackdaw1888 :-)
Ps...
I will gladly send you my email address
Jack get over yourself will ya, Andrew composing music for your lyrics but already you're sounding like you dont give a ::)
Kind Regards whatever 8)
? ? ?
Jack :-(
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Hi Jackdaw
I'm composing music for your lyrics. I would like to add a middle 8 so do you think you could write a mid section after the 2nd chorus that breaks the format please?
Thanks
Andrew
Cheers for your PM back Andrew and indeed your advice.
I would prefer a guitar solo medley re the Mid 8 but at short notice I have just come up with this...
Eleanor Eleanor I cry out your name
Eleanor Eleanor please stay and remain
You dry out my tears
An' ease all my fears
And your lovin' just soaks me like rain
Jackdaw1888 :-)
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Hey JACKDAW
I sent you a polite, private, warning about bumping your posts
Rather than reply privately and have a meaningful discussion you decided to bump your thread again with a "passive aggressive" post:
However I may have to personally message you or email you as it has recently been 'suggested' that I myself merely post on here in efforts to 'bump' my songs up the ratings and keep them at the fore come top of the page???
This was then followed by a number of subsequent "bumps" to your thread (defined in this case as consecutive posts by the original poster)
Please take this as your final warning as this constant "bumping" and "passive aggressive" nature does not fit well with the community feel we have spent many years trying to establish here
I completely understand your eagerness to post (which I do encourage) and I am really pleased for you that you have found someone to collaborate with to put your excellent lyrics to music - and I am personally interested to hear the final product
However, I can't risk the smooth running of this forum so could I please request that you:
- think carefully before posting
- refrain from bumping your own posts (to make it clear I will request that you wait until at least 2 other people have made comments before responding)
- have discussions about collaborations via private message/email with collaborators rather than continually bumping your own threads
This is not to get at you in any way - it is simply not fair on other people to have the same thread at the top of the lyrics section all the time
I am ALWAYS happy to discuss things and, prefer to do so in private, but you did not respond to my private message so I had no option than to post in this thread
If there is no change in your posting habits I will have no option and will need to lock your threads either temporarily or permanently to be fair to everyone
As I have said - this is nothing personal and I really do appreciate your eagerness to post and contribution to the forum (we have all got carried away at times) so I hope you can understand why I need to balance this with fairness to others
Thanks
Boydie
Ps - the irony of me bumping this thread to warn you about bumping this thread is not lost on me ;D ::) ;D
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Hey JACKDAW
I sent you a polite, private, warning about bumping your posts
Rather than reply privately and have a meaningful discussion you decided to bump your thread again with a "passive aggressive" post:
However I may have to personally message you or email you as it has recently been 'suggested' that I myself merely post on here in efforts to 'bump' my songs up the ratings and keep them at the fore come top of the page???
This was then followed by a number of subsequent "bumps" to your thread (defined in this case as consecutive posts by the original poster)
Please take this as your final warning as this constant "bumping" and "passive aggressive" nature does not fit well with the community feel we have spent many years trying to establish here
I completely understand your eagerness to post (which I do encourage) and I am really pleased for you that you have found someone to collaborate with to put your excellent lyrics to music - and I am personally interested to hear the final product
However, I can't risk the smooth running of this forum so could I please request that you:
- think carefully before posting
- refrain from bumping your own posts (to make it clear I will request that you wait until at least 2 other people have made comments before responding)
- have discussions about collaborations via private message/email with collaborators rather than continually bumping your own threads
This is not to get at you in any way - it is simply not fair on other people to have the same thread at the top of the lyrics section all the time
I am ALWAYS happy to discuss things and, prefer to do so in private, but you did not respond to my private message so I had no option than to post in this thread
If there is no change in your posting habits I will have no option and will need to lock your threads either temporarily or permanently to be fair to everyone
As I have said - this is nothing personal and I really do appreciate your eagerness to post and contribution to the forum (we have all got carried away at times) so I hope you can understand why I need to balance this with fairness to others
Thanks
Boydie
Ps - the irony of me bumping this thread to warn you about bumping this thread is not lost on me ;D ::) ;D
Greetings Boydie.
I hope you are well.
May I offer that I did not feel that your email nor your PM warranted a reply nor indeed asked for a reply?
Apologies if that offended you in any way.
However, moving on, I am now fully aware of Your instruction NOT to post on any of my Lyrics or submissions until atleast TWO others have made comment.
Kind Regards
Jackdaw
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Thanks JACKDAW
It is absolutely fine and there really is no problem
A response was not necessary but when you made a comment in this thread and then bumped it again I thought it would be best to intervene and clarify the guidelines
No offence was taken by me and the best thing about this forum is that very few people bear any grudges as most of us have made errors or got carried away with posting
I am sure that there will be no further issues and I hope your song works out with VANDAYAY - I can't wait to hear the finished product!!!
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Thanks JACKDAW
It is absolutely fine and there really is no problem
A response was not necessary but when you made a comment in this thread and then bumped it again I thought it would be best to intervene and clarify the guidelines
No offence was taken by me and the best thing about this forum is that very few people bear any grudges as most of us have made errors or got carried away with posting
I am sure that there will be no further issues and I hope your song works out with VANDAYAY - I can't wait to hear the finished product!!!
Thankyou Boydie.
Me too.
The 8 bar I offered is prob the bestest lines I have ever wrote.
But maybe the second line should read ...
Eleanor Elearnor you drive me insane...
Regards
Jackdaw1888 :-)
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Lovely words and would love to hear it as a song
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Lovely words and would love to hear it as a song
You will...
Promise...
Jackdaw1888 :-)
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Looking forward to hearing this as a song as the lyrics are so good
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I would just like to say a big thankyou to the Forum and to Boydie for allowing me to post my works on here.
The Face of Eleanor is being recorded as we speak.
Many thanks to you all.
Jackdaw1888 :-)
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Excellent news Jack!! Can't wait to hear these to music!!
Well done pal...first of many I hope
Darren
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Excellent news Jack!! Can't wait to hear these to music!!
Well done pal...first of many I hope
Darren
Arrr many many thanks Darren.
You are a Star.
And well done for coming forward and commenting kind sir!!!
Best Wishes
Jackdaw :-)
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Looking forward to hearing this as a song as the lyrics are so good
Thankyou mister P.
When its recording is done I will personally make SURE that You hear ELEANOR :-)
Jackdaw1888
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Hi Jackdaw
I'm composing music for your lyrics. I would like to add a middle 8 so do you think you could write a mid section after the 2nd chorus that breaks the format please?
Thanks
Andrew
Hiya Andrew.
And many many thanks for your interest and enthusiasm re my lyrics/words.
As for your request I will have a think and see what I can come up with ok?
However I may have to personally message you or email you as it has recently been 'suggested' that I myself merely post on here in efforts to 'bump' my songs up the ratings and keep them at the fore come top of the page???
Kind Regards
Jackdaw1888 :-)
Ps...
I will gladly send you my email address
Jack get over yourself will ya, Andrew composing music for your lyrics but already you're sounding like you dont give a ::)
Kind Regards whatever 8)
Get over yourself too.
I never heard from Androo
Did yoo?
And yes I give an F... :-)
Particularly about my hard work and my Lyrics!!!
Do yoo???
Jackdaw1888
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Hi Jackdaw
I'm composing music for your lyrics. I would like to add a middle 8 so do you think you could write a mid section after the 2nd chorus that breaks the format please?
Thanks
Andrew
Hiya Andrew.
And many many thanks for your interest and enthusiasm re my lyrics/words.
As for your request I will have a think and see what I can come up with ok?
However I may have to personally message you or email you as it has recently been 'suggested' that I myself merely post on here in efforts to 'bump' my songs up the ratings and keep them at the fore come top of the page???
Kind Regards
Jackdaw1888 :-)
Ps...
I will gladly send you my email address
Jack get over yourself will ya, Andrew composing music for your lyrics but already you're sounding like you dont give a ::)
Kind Regards whatever 8)
Get over yourself too.
I never heard from Androo
Did yoo?
And yes I give an F... :-)
Particularly about my hard work and my Lyrics!!!
Jackdaw1888
Hey Jack how you keeping welcome to the world songwriters 8)
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Hi Jackdaw
I'm composing music for your lyrics. I would like to add a middle 8 so do you think you could write a mid section after the 2nd chorus that breaks the format please?
Thanks
Andrew
Hiya Andrew.
And many many thanks for your interest and enthusiasm re my lyrics/words.
As for your request I will have a think and see what I can come up with ok?
However I may have to personally message you or email you as it has recently been 'suggested' that I myself merely post on here in efforts to 'bump' my songs up the ratings and keep them at the fore come top of the page???
Kind Regards
Jackdaw1888 :-)
Ps...
I will gladly send you my email address
Jack get over yourself will ya, Andrew composing music for your lyrics but already you're sounding like you dont give a ::)
Kind Regards whatever 8)
Get over yourself too.
I never heard from Androo
Did yoo?
And yes I give an F... :-)
Particularly about my hard work and my Lyrics!!!
Jackdaw1888
Hey Jack how you keeping welcome to the world songwriters 8)
I am doing fine thanky.
Hope you are too.
The world of Songwriters is very different from Poetry or ghostwriting Books but Jackdaw loves a new challenge :-)
Kind Regards
Jackdaw1888
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Hi Jackdaw
I'm composing music for your lyrics. I would like to add a middle 8 so do you think you could write a mid section after the 2nd chorus that breaks the format please?
Thanks
Andrew
Hiya Andrew.
And many many thanks for your interest and enthusiasm re my lyrics/words.
As for your request I will have a think and see what I can come up with ok?
However I may have to personally message you or email you as it has recently been 'suggested' that I myself merely post on here in efforts to 'bump' my songs up the ratings and keep them at the fore come top of the page???
Kind Regards
Jackdaw1888 :-)
Ps...
I will gladly send you my email address
Jack get over yourself will ya, Andrew composing music for your lyrics but already you're sounding like you dont give a ::)
Kind Regards whatever 8)
Get over yourself too.
I never heard from Androo
Did yoo?
And yes I give an F... :-)
Particularly about my hard work and my Lyrics!!!
Jackdaw1888
Hey Jack how you keeping welcome to the world songwriters 8)
I am doing fine thanky.
Hope you are too.
The world of Songwriters is very different from Poetry or ghostwriting Books but Jackdaw loves a new challenge :-)
Kind Regards
Jackdaw1888
Nice one Jack and kind regards to you too 8)
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Hi Jackdaw
I'm composing music for your lyrics. I would like to add a middle 8 so do you think you could write a mid section after the 2nd chorus that breaks the format please?
Thanks
Andrew
Hiya Andrew.
And many many thanks for your interest and enthusiasm re my lyrics/words.
As for your request I will have a think and see what I can come up with ok?
However I may have to personally message you or email you as it has recently been 'suggested' that I myself merely post on here in efforts to 'bump' my songs up the ratings and keep them at the fore come top of the page???
Kind Regards
Jackdaw1888 :-)
Ps...
I will gladly send you my email address
Jack get over yourself will ya, Andrew composing music for your lyrics but already you're sounding like you dont give a ::)
Kind Regards whatever 8)
Get over yourself too.
I never heard from Androo
Did yoo?
And yes I give an F... :-)
Particularly about my hard work and my Lyrics!!!
Jackdaw1888
Hey Jack how you keeping welcome to the world songwriters 8)
I am doing fine thanky.
Hope you are too.
The world of Songwriters is very different from Poetry or ghostwriting Books but Jackdaw loves a new challenge :-)
Kind Regards
Jackdaw1888
Nice one Jack and kind regards to you too 8)
Cheers... have a nice eve
Jack :-)
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Hello Jackdaw :)
You write good lyrics.
I'm not a particularly competitive person and that isn't why I visit the forum. I'm interested in writing and enjoying what others write.
I've probably written upwards of 20 songs in the two years or so I've been a member here...as well as quite a few lyrics...but I have no idea how many views they've had. Those songs and lyrics are all kicking around the forum if you want to read any of them.
best wishes
Paul
Hi Paul.
Hope you are well.
Re the 20 or so Songs that you have written or put upon this great Forum etc etc...
Please can you post me some or their Titles on here... ie this Thread.
I am interested.
And would love to read them...
Or make comment :-)
Thankyou.
Jackdaw1888
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Despite numerous warnings, both publicly & privately, and a very specific instruction to not post until at least 2 replies by others were posted I have no option but to lock your threads whilst the MODS discuss/implement any further action