I’ve listened to this several times, trying to appraise your song fairly. I’m struggling to connect with both the lyrics and music. For that to happen, I’ve got to to relate to the subject matter and to recognise thoughts and feelings that may be applicable to my own circumstances. I think, that’s the main goal of a songwriter - to connect with others so that they can recognise events that may be true of their own circumstances in the past or the present and also to evoke emotion. I’m not able to relate to the title “Wall Seeker.” This may be inspired by a work of literature but I still need to feel a connection. At the moment, you have a fairly bleak set of lyrics set to a jovial melody that doesn’t evoke emotion for me and therefore I’m struggling to connect.
I think this would suit multiple voices, it has a hymn like quality. If I was producing this, I would leave plenty of space, long bass notes and loose drums, making the choir/communal voices the focal point.
Paul