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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Works in Progress => Topic started by: Rick trodat on May 22, 2017, 10:01:12 AM
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Who can help me out? I wrote and recorded this song last weekend and I have written down some lyrics, but I can't find the vocal line in this.
https://soundcloud.com/schermer/lifes-door (https://soundcloud.com/schermer/lifes-door)
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Hey Rick, first time listening to you, you definitely have a great style I like all your tracks, on this great piece the only thing ill say at this moment is post what lyrics you have on this and let us all find that vocal line, sing along, no doubt about it great stage presence feel here.
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Rick,
It's a lovely mellow piece. I can hear a vocal melody for the verse and pre-chorus.
I think you've got the melody line on the chorus, thats ones your guitars are playing.
If you'd like me to suggest them please just say, in this thread.
Awesome sounding guitars too.
:-)
Neil
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@Oldbutyet; Thanks!
Hey Neil. Thanks! If you got a suggestion, that will be great!. Of course you'll end up as a co-writer. 8)
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Later today I will write down the lyrics I have in mind.
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Rick that's great, is it downloadable on soundcloud?
Neil
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I think so. But you can also send me a private mail by this site. I will send you a wav file then.
I am very excited to work with you.
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Hi Rick.
I am useless re Music.
But can I just offer this...
Within a certain part of your guitar rift I hear the words...
She is the one etc etc
She is the one etc etc
Good luck
Jackdaw1888 :-)
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At what time do you hear that. Very courious
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I'm not sure what you are looking for, but as I listen to the composition, there are endless possibilities to follow the music to a very suitable vocal melody that complements the music and creates real drama.
Some of those "endless possibilities" will go away with your lyrical choices which you haven't shared, so there is no way to make a judgement about how to fit them to the music.
There is potential for a really good collaboration here.