Hi its Newgod
well first of all I like the last verse most,
beside that all the other ones are nice too, the descriptions are clear and they reflect emos clearly, and it triggers emos correctly,
I don't see much in this song that needs working the rhyming is nice, the flow seems alright, whatever words are use they function properly,
its over all a nice song, if you are looking forward to record this one you should do that
anyways keep working and keep smiling
may god bless you