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Walking in Another Man's Shoes

« on: March 03, 2013, 11:10:59 AM »
I think the lyrics do a good job of explaining the story here. I often over generalize, being vague about topics and it's a difficult thing to stop that and be more descriptive. So please tell me what you think.


Verse

I know she sees me like i'm clay
And from her deepest yesterday
She's slowly molding me away
And making me like him

She had me change the way I walk
Chose who I see and how I talk
But never will she make be balk
And answer her with 'No'

Verse

She bought me shoes i've seen him in
Jackets, jeans and cartigans
Clothes I don't like being in
But she won't ever know

And my attire, so long worn in
Are haggard things now stored in bins
My closet space now holds within
The costume of that man


Chorus

Will I ever feel complete
Walking in another man's...
Am I just a fool she keeps
Walking in another man's shoes


Vese

Well if I ever told her no
I'm sure she'd quickly let me go
But I would never want to know
A life not by her side

I know that what she does is wrong
I know it's dumb to play along
And yet I know i'm just not strong
Enough to let her go


Chorus

Will I ever feel complete
Walking in another man's
Am I just a fool she keeps
Walking in another man's shoes

Bridge

The hardest part of all
Is knowing she still wants him
Knowing if he came for her
Nothing I could do
Would make her stay

Chorus

Will I ever feel complete
Walking in another man's...
Am I just a fool she keep
Walking in another man's...

Will I ever feel complete
Walking in another man's...
Am I just a fool she keep
Walking in another man's shoes
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Re: Walking in Another Man's Shoes

« Reply #1 on: March 03, 2013, 11:26:12 AM »
I like the theme of the song. To me it was something different and fresh. And I thought it all rhymed well with each other.
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Re: Walking in Another Man's Shoes

« Reply #2 on: March 04, 2013, 03:04:12 AM »
This is very good, and I can relate to it too (I'm sure I've interpreted it differently from the actual meanings, but that's what I love about lyrics/poetry, you can mold what some songs/lyrics mean to you like clay ("I know she sees me like i'm clay"), I wrote that and then remembered that's the first line -_-. Lool.

I approve.  :) Thanks for sharing.
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Re: Walking in Another Man's Shoes

« Reply #3 on: March 04, 2013, 04:17:30 PM »
I've never heard a song with this topic before, so I like the out-of-the-box-ness of it. I really like the rhymes and word choices, and the strong chorus. Great, well polished write, would like to hear it to music!
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Re: Walking in Another Man's Shoes

« Reply #4 on: March 05, 2013, 12:50:19 PM »
Quote from: Innominate on March 03, 2013, 11:10:59 AM
I think the lyrics do a good job of explaining the story here. I often over generalize, being vague about topics and it's a difficult thing to stop that and be more descriptive. So please tell me what you think.


Verse

I know she sees me like i'm clay
And from her deepest yesterday
She's slowly molding me away
And making me like him

She had me change the way I walk
Chose who I see and how I talk
But never will she make be balk
And answer her with 'No'

Verse

She bought me shoes i've seen him in
Jackets, jeans and cartigans
Clothes I don't like being in
But she won't ever know

And my attire, so long worn in
Are haggard things now stored in bins
My closet space now holds within
The costume of that man


Chorus

Will I ever feel complete
Walking in another man's...
Am I just a fool she keeps
Walking in another man's shoes


Vese

Well if I ever told her no
I'm sure she'd quickly let me go
But I would never want to know
A life not by her side

I know that what she does is wrong
I know it's dumb to play along
And yet I know i'm just not strong
Enough to let her go


Chorus

Will I ever feel complete
Walking in another man's
Am I just a fool she keeps
Walking in another man's shoes

Bridge

The hardest part of all
Is knowing she still wants him
Knowing if he came for her
Nothing I could do
Would make her stay

Chorus

Will I ever feel complete
Walking in another man's...
Am I just a fool she keep
Walking in another man's...

Will I ever feel complete
Walking in another man's...
Am I just a fool she keep
Walking in another man's shoes

It's good i especially like the bits iv made bold.
Good set of lyrics Innominate  :)
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Re: Walking in Another Man's Shoes

« Reply #5 on: March 10, 2013, 02:00:01 AM »
Wow... talk about a really heartfelt deep song... some words i didnt understand so i had to look them up and the wording sometimes through me off but this is such a greatly written song i have to say and the lyrics are very very well thought out
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Re: Walking in Another Man's Shoes

« Reply #6 on: March 11, 2013, 11:24:18 AM »
Nice work i really like the rhyme pattern you've got going on in this song :)
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Re: Walking in Another Man's Shoes

« Reply #7 on: March 12, 2013, 09:30:46 PM »
It's nice when other people can identify with something you've written so i'm glad that happened. I wanted to write something from the male perspective that doesn't often get expressed and ended up with this. Thanks to everyone for the feedback, it's always very helpful. (:
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Re: Walking in Another Man's Shoes

« Reply #8 on: March 13, 2013, 10:31:11 AM »
Do you play music to your lyrics ?? .. I mean you are only lyricist ??
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Re: Walking in Another Man's Shoes

« Reply #9 on: March 13, 2013, 07:01:27 PM »
Hey Saeed, most of the time i write music for the lyrics, melody at least. This one is incomplete musically as I really only have a melody for the chorus although i'm not crazy about it.
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Re: Walking in Another Man's Shoes

« Reply #10 on: March 16, 2013, 01:00:47 AM »
Utterly brilliant!

Great angle for a story, one I've never heard before.

If you were trying to be mire descriptive; congrats. You painted a great picture. The part about the wardrobe was excellent. Also the "hanging clothes" line was almost a double entendre (hanging - dead man, geddit?)

All it really needs is a bit of an emotional injection. How is all this making him FEEL? Abused? Glad for the attention? That'd make it even MORE descriptive

Really really liked it Innominate

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Re: Walking in Another Man's Shoes

« Reply #11 on: March 16, 2013, 10:38:28 AM »
Very nice...very poetic...I love the subject matter...I might be tempted to jump right into what she's doing with you in the very first line with something like, 'she sculpts me like a ball of clay'...but it's great the way it is as well...in the bridge I think I would put the 'that's the hardest part of all' at the end of the bridge and just start with 'knowing she still wants him'...I think it would be stronger that way, but that's just my opinion...I these lyrics are absolutely wonderful  :) thanks for this share
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Re: Walking in Another Man's Shoes

« Reply #12 on: March 16, 2013, 01:25:38 PM »
Good stuff Innominate.

The rhyming structure makes it flow well.

Covers two topics; someone trying to change you and always feeling like you're second choice.  Does both without labouring on the points.  A good write.

Only niggling point is that would replace that word 'balk'.  It doesn't 'sing' well, if you know what I mean?  ;D
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Re: Walking in Another Man's Shoes

« Reply #13 on: March 16, 2013, 03:22:40 PM »
Hi  I like these lyrics  its great story telling & at the same time its personal & reveals inner feelings about being 2nd choice in a relationship   I enoyed  reading lyrics   Thank you for share  :)
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