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Bright Not Broken

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« on: April 01, 2012, 02:28:07 AM »
Ok...So...I've been trying to turn things around...as you might now I had a little struggle with life, I'm kinda getting better, sort of...I guess I just need to learn how to live it's weird cause getting older isn't how I imagined it to be, uhh, so I noticed the lyrics section was lacking something, so here I am, anyhow, ever got such bad news that you just sank?
You were just there frozen in despair
Yeah. Me too



Tell me this isn't true
Laying here next to you
I just got the news....

I've seen this look on faces
In the saddest of places
Like a graveyard at night
While a mother grips her sons photograph ever so tight
Scared of letting go of him
Scared of letting go
Cause she's so used to having him
It's the only way she'll ever know

Oh please...
Don't let this get the best of me
Don't let it take the rest of me
These texts are hardly subtle
This can't be happening
Just give me one more week
And don't remind me this is happening
Cause I'm not leaving this way

I read what you wrote
My heart sank like a stone
Like it could never float
I have one last chance to right my wrongs
Because they'll send me out
With my face staring in anticipation
A mix of alcohol and desperation
I've got to do something
I can probably do nothing

Oh please...
Don't let this get the best of me
Don't let it take the rest of me
These texts are hardly subtle
This can't be happening
Just give me one more week
And don't remind me this is happening
Cause I'm not leaving this way

Any news is good news today
Any news is good news on a day like today
Any news is good news right now...
Any news is good news....


What if we both just smiled at once?

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« Reply #1 on: April 01, 2012, 03:04:56 AM »
"so I noticed the lyrics section was lacking something, so here I am..."

I hope the other lyric writers are not as insulted as I would have been with that  :D :D :D

There are holes in the sky where the rain gets in  , but they're ever so small, that's why rain is thin.

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« Reply #2 on: April 01, 2012, 07:09:12 AM »
Heh, lacking, oh dear...

Compelling piece... Haven't quite got my finger on what it's about yet but I've only read it once so I'm sure it'll make sense after a few more reads...

As always, very well done. Really evokes strong emotions
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« Reply #3 on: April 01, 2012, 08:56:04 PM »
Haha well, it is if I'm honest, and well, let me know when you think you've got it and i'll tell you if you're right, also, thanks
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« Reply #4 on: April 02, 2012, 12:25:20 AM »

moving words sellon,
think youve got a great gift and a future and should collect your best/favourite work and present it to a publisher, they are out there.
and/or involved in one of these poetry open mic events and read your work..use your pain,
your paying for it everyday, get something back, set yourself free..
nooms

i may not believe this tomorrow...

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« Reply #5 on: April 02, 2012, 02:18:31 AM »
Hahaha nooms, I'm not THAT good am I? I don't think a publisher would accept my work...would they?
And who would take it? I don't know anyone or anything really...
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« Reply #6 on: April 02, 2012, 03:37:44 AM »
Ok, my first guess as to what it's about:

Someone the narrator knows commits suicide and this is about the narrator finding out
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« Reply #7 on: April 03, 2012, 01:56:34 AM »
Hahaha no, it's about getting sick, read it again, it might look clearer.
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