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Dutchbeat:
nice, very subtle and beautiful

you are good, CalmLondon

perhaps a more steady bass towards the end, some bit of steady deep groove???

just a thought

ShinyThang:
I always feel unqualified to comment on your work CalmLondon but I always want to. Such high quality from the get-go and so many elements I wish I'd come up with myself. This one is gorgeous. Another special song. It's great to hear your own voice up front. One or two notes get the better of you but I think your voice has a nice, silky quality. Not thin but perhaps just a little ... small. I think you may be holding back a little? You do get great results from your session musicians but I reckon you could do a good job of this one by yourself. Perhaps if you knew yours was going to be the final vox and not just a demo for the pros?
I'm not sure I like the well, what is it, the first sound a sort of guitar sound played a bit like a piano? It runs right through the track and I feel it seems to be hurrying it along. I feel taking this out would leave a more spacious and relaxed sound created by the strings, the piano and the guitar just popping in now and then. A nice soft bass is probably the only other sound I'd like to hear in there but I'd also like to see the guitar getting a little more limelight. It sounds like it's dying to get going a bit more.
Lyrically it is rock solid. Sticking to the theme of deep contemplation with no outward signs (well, that's what I get anyway) Only changing state in the narrator's dream. There's just one line my brain wants different and that is 'it's my company she seeks' which I hear as 'it's my company she's seeking'.

calmlondon:
Hello crew,

Feedback means a lot as always, and you're a lovely bunch of people. I take your comments seriously.

The piano track will defo get shelved when I rework the demo - but will introduce a more light touch piano as advised. The piano got on my nerves too.

Dutchbeat - would appreciate a steer on how I could work a beat into a track like this. Beats are your forte, and I had a go but couldn't find a groove to work.

CS - I might lose my voice as I don't do singing.... but might seek a subtle vocalist do keep it gentle. It's not like a have a 10 man crew to call on, but I'll try and find a local muso who doesn't mind a doing vocals for a nice bottle of plonk. Thanks buddy.

Neil, appreciate you getting into the details of what needs sorting. Agree and will fix that and feature the guitars a lot more. Cheers.

ShinyThang...  you're always so kind to me and you are so qualified to comment on anyone's work, nevermind mine. I'll lose the dodgy piano and also had a nice soft bass in mind. Good spot.

Seriousfun - yes to your comments.

Songsthatcry - I still have your lyrics in mind for that other track. Not forgotten.

flossie:
I love your music!

I think it's very beautiful and I would add another chorus at the end as it's too short and I want to hear more.  I think you, yourself should do the vocal as it adds such an innocent and vulnerable quality to the song - it's part of it's charm.  I

 think you could go one of two ways, you could do an Emile sande Clowns type of thing, with a really rich piano and some strings (make sure the piano sounds real) or you could turn this a bit more country which I think would work really well too.

Well done though
x

S.T.C:
Well iv`e had a few more listens....

I did write earlier and then deleted...that i don`t think you should give this to your guy to do....i`m still not sure if i don`t stick by that....i think a voice like yours is perfect for this tune.

This ideally needs an orchestra and choir with it ..(anyone)..

I think you`ve conjured up something  that`s beautiful and elegant with a lot of promise.......

I like the lake metaphor .

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