Nice one ! . . . you've got a very catchy pop chorus and verse here . . . the recording is a bit slammed to the max, but I get it's early stages. So, I get this idea it's about young lovers who just want to run away from everything, and make a life together somewhere else . . . you've got a great start, now just tell the story with a few more details to bring the listener inside. If you're able, maybe list to McCartney's "The Back Seat of my Car" . . . lyrically, that's the vibe I'm getting . . . maybe introduce Mom and Dad's point of view, but you only have 4 minutes ? Good luck, I'll circle back . . .