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rightly:
I put this together about 3 years ago
On the tail end of a very productive phase. I was exhausted.
I wanted to return to it and give it more,
but I had health issues and other aspects of life became more urgent.
So, I fell off the horse with it, but for me, it kept its charm.
I thought it one of my rare uplifting songs.

Because of new software n hardware, it'd take a lot of figuring out,
I'd have liked to have taken it further.
These days I've plenty new material to focus on. So...
I thought It's best just to let it go.

Link:

Listen to Day & Night by 2 Rightly on #SoundCloud
https://on.soundcloud.com/naFGb

Lyrics:

Night and Day

the face you make, night and day
rise and shine, come what may
is this all you would ask of me,
the low hanging fruit from the nearest tree?
I have my pride
tell me, what's your need

the stars align, bold and bright
 
sirens wail, my body aches I
cannot fail or hesitate
this, my dove, my olive branch I
take my lead from given circumstance
wind in my sails
as I take your hand

I cannot fail, you understand

jumping fences, the open field
no loose change to conceal
useful friend, my tiny empire
to defend, to move and inspire
me at your side
we'll survive if not thrive

taking chances, do or die
_____

Rightly

moraamarolaloba:
I hope you are now recovered from your health and life problems.
It's the first song I heard today on my sunny and fresh morning and it has been a great complement to my general state.
I like the tempo, it already has the dance or cadence that accompanies this story.
Good lyrics, special and personal.
I can't criticize anything here, I think everything is in its place. The voice... It's one of your best performances, for sure.
Well, I already opened the comments so...the rest will come later hahaha
Good morning and good week @rightly

rightly:

--- Quote from: moraamarolaloba on April 22, 2024, 11:21:04 AM ---I hope you are now recovered from your health and life problems.
It's the first song I heard today on my sunny and fresh morning and it has been a great complement to my general state.
I like the tempo, it already has the dance or cadence that accompanies this story.
Good lyrics, special and personal.
I can't criticize anything here, I think everything is in its place. The voice... It's one of your best performances, for sure.
Well, I already opened the comments so...the rest will come later hahaha
Good morning and good week @rightly

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Thanks mora
I'm glad you like the song!

Nick Ryder:
Hi @rightly

This is a curious number and has a 60's vibe to it. I'd love to hear some sitar in the mix just to give it a real retro feel.

Like so many songs posted on this forum, I think it would benefit from a strong chorus because whilst the verses are fairly strong, as are the bridges, without a chorus hook I'm not sure the song is strong enough for this listener to want to come back to it and ultimately, I assume that is what we all want - repeat listens?

rightly:

--- Quote from: Nick Ryder on April 23, 2024, 02:17:24 PM ---Hi @rightly

This is a curious number and has a 60's vibe to it. I'd love to hear some sitar in the mix just to give it a real retro feel.

Like so many songs posted on this forum, I think it would benefit from a strong chorus because whilst the verses are fairly strong, as are the bridges, without a chorus hook I'm not sure the song is strong enough for this listener to want to come back to it and ultimately, I assume that is what we all want - repeat listens?

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@Nick Ryder

Yes, it could more 60s. I've never used sitar. 😆 it's very powerful.
I'll get around to it eventually.
It's been said I dress 70s

Repeat listens is nice yes.
I sometimes write choruses,and sometimes find them tedious.
I know it's an element that's often expected
If i was trying to write a mega hit hot popsong I'd be more inclined to put one in there.
But I'm not, so I'm free to discover other guidelines and have other restrictions.

Thank for taking the time to share your thoughts.

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