Hi forum.
I've not been writing songs long, and this is the first thing I've recorded that's a finished song and a rung above just experimenting and messing about.
Constructive criticism welcome of course.
Also, it's done in a country style, but I'm not someone who really listens to country music. So, I'd be interested to know whether you think this works in that genre, or whether it seems like just a pastiche.
Many thanks in advance.
https://soundcloud.com/user-78460122/miserable-cowboy-songLYRICS:
You called your boss up and you told the swine what he could do.
And now your landlord wants you out because you're overdue.
Please understand, it's not that I don't care.
I deeply sympathize, but we all have our cross to bear.
I am a man who's in love with a woman, yeah.
I am a man who's in love with a woman, yeah.
You fell down at the grocery store clutching at your chest.
And now the doctors say you've got eleven months, at best.
Well, I'm not the kinda guy who knows what to say.
I guess it sucks for you but we all have to go someday.
I am a man who's in love with a woman, hey.
One day maybe I'll think of someone other than myself.
Right now I can't lift me up, never mind nobody else.
Your woman's got you feeling like you've had enough of it.
It gets mid-evening and she tells you that that she has to split.
I feel you, buddy. I really do.
She'll never leave me but she'll always have this thing with you.
I am the man who's in love with this woman too.