[Paulski]

Got this one in the queue for some music - let me know if anything needs fixing please!

Three - Seven - Oh
Copyright © 2016 Tennyson Road Music

Kuala Lumpur
Departing for
A China shore
A pin of light
Against the night
Then out of sight

(chorus)
Three, seven, oh - Where did you go?
Where have you taken those precious souls?
We're searching the horizon for your ivory wings
And awaiting their arrival in Beijing

These weary eyes
Forever weep
They never close
These worried minds
Will never sleep
Until they're home

Three, seven, oh - Where did you go?
Where have you taken those precious souls?
We're searching the horizon for your ivory wings
And awaiting their arrival in Beijing

(bridge)
Three, seven, oh - Where have you gone?
What about those mothers and those fathers?
Three, seven, oh - What have you done?
What about their sons?
What about their daughters?

These weary eyes
Forever weep
They'll never close
These worried minds
Will never sleep
Until you bring them home

Three, seven, oh - Where did you go?
Where have you taken their precious souls?
We're searching the horizon for your ivory wings
As we wait for their arrival,
We still pray for their survival
As we wait for their arrival in Beijing

Three, seven, oh..
Where did you go..?

[delb0y]

Works for me, Paul!

Only thing is the proximity of arrival / ivory / horizon. These words all feel a bit similar and it's either going to be a brilliant pairing... or may not work. Probably the former, knowing you. But it's the only bit that jumped out.

Look forward to it!

Cheers
Derek

[CaliaMoko]

This is very moving...I can't wait to hear it. I have no nits.

Vicki

[PaulAds]

Excellent, Paul

This is pitched perfectly...not drippy, sickly or schmaltzy...just a lovely thoughtful lyric about a tragic event...done with great skill and sensitivity

[Paulski]

@delb0y

Thanks Derek - appreciate your reading and commenting. Yeah those words were picked deliberately to kind of reflect off one another. Like you said - could turn sour. Probably will

@CaliaMoko

Cheers Vicki - I have a melody but still working on how to frame it. Risky business writing to current events - don't want to come across trite.

@PaulAds

Thanks Paul - glad you see a balance here. Such a tragedy and unanswered question for the families.

[diademgrove]

Hi Paul,

A perfect example of how to write about current events. Great set of lyrics, looking forward to hearing the finished song.

Keith

[Paulski]

Hi Paul,

A perfect example of how to write about current events. Great set of lyrics, looking forward to hearing the finished song.

Keith

Thanks Keith - now the music part which in some ways could be even more difficult. Nothing happy, of course, but can't get too depressing either.. guess I'll try to listen to songs with similar lyrics and go from there..
Paul