What I like:
Lines like "Stars hold your fire", "Save your luck for the wishful thinkers", "Under that broken sky", "Your northern lights were a midnight feast", the melody, and how it all fits together.
What could be improved:
I'm not sure about the title. It isn't really the hook, but then the title doesn't always have to be the hook and I do like the title. So that's a maybe.
The production could use a little work, maybe, but that's not my area, so I can't say for sure. The ending was too abrupt, though.
Vicki