[Paulski]

Hi all
Firstly sorry for posting so many lyrics lately. It's just that they'se coming to me so fast these days I don't want to miss the moment. I don't know if there is a limit in this section - but if anyone is annoyed please let me know.
Having said that, here is my latest write - it's supposed to be a fast-tempo rock/metal song.
Comments and suggs are really appreciated!
Thanks
Paul

Bad Dog
Copyright © 2014 Tennyson Road Music

Spoken:
"Hey!  
That's BAD!
Bad Dog!
You're a BAD DOG!"

vs
Sleep all day
Bark all night
You're a bad dog
Hear complaints how
Hard you bite
You're a bad dog

{pre}
Since the day you left your mother
You been stayin' with your lovers
But I pray they'll run for cover
Cause you'll be strayin' like no other

{ch}
Bad dog
Bad dog
You're a bad, bad dog!
Bad dog
Bad dog
You're a bad, bad dog!

Chasin' cars
Breakin' hearts
Made a mess again
I spit on the grave
Of the one who claimed
You're my best friend

{pre}
Ever since you've been a puppy
All your bitches 'been unlucky

{ch}
Bad dog
Bad dog
You're a bad, bad dog!
Bad dog
Bad dog
You're a bad, bad dog!

{br}
I swear to God, that she just lets your arse-hole out the door
That's when she spots that you just left a parcel on the floor!

{vs}
No surprise
You wandered off again
You're a bad dog
I hope she buys
A stronger chain
You're a bad dog

{ch}
Bad dog
Bad dog
You're a bad, bad dog!
Bad dog
Bad dog
You're a bad, bad dog!
You're a BAD! BAD! DOG!!

[EpiphoneEpiphany]

this is fun to read

can't think of anything to improve it or change it

some nice rhymes in the middle of the lines (day, stay, pray, stray)

Since the day you left your mother
You been stayin' with your lovers
But I pray they'll run for cover
Cause you'll be strayin' like no other

also (arse-hole, parcel)

I swear to God, that she just lets your arse-hole out the door
That's when she spots that you just left a parcel on the floor!

Cracking song Gromit!

[hardtwistmusic]

Hi Paul...   

Do you know what every dog's motto is? 

"Piss on it."   )

[Paulski]

this is fun to read

can't think of anything to improve it or change it

some nice rhymes in the middle of the lines (day, stay, pray, stray)

Since the day you left your mother
You been stayin' with your lovers
But I pray they'll run for cover
Cause you'll be strayin' like no other

also (arse-hole, parcel)

I swear to God, that she just lets your arse-hole out the door
That's when she spots that you just left a parcel on the floor!

Cracking song Gromit!

Hi EE
Thanks so much for commenting - I was beginning to think this lyric was too rude and people thought - "if I can't say anything nice, I won't say anything at all".. Well, this is supposed to be a bit of potty humour as it is a Rock/Metal song...
PS - I googled Gromit and watched a clip - now that's funny!
Thanks again,
Paul

[Paulski]

Hi Paul...   

Do you know what every dog's motto is? 

"Piss on it."   )

Good one Verlon - I've seen them put that motto to action!
Paul

[GTB]

Spot on Paulski ;-)

This is actually a highly skilled piece of lyric writing which is disguised as a 'simple' song.  Well done.
GTB

[Paulski]

Spot on Paulski ;-)

This is actually a highly skilled piece of lyric writing which is disguised as a 'simple' song.  Well done.
GTB

Thanks GTB - so glad you think that!

[benjo]

 
 YEAH I AGREE WITH GTB

 VERY SIMPLE BUT VERY EFECTIVE

 i really enjoyed that one no nit pic

 nice job

[MinuteSekunde]

Great work, I really enjoyed having a read through

My favourite lyric from the whole song is -

"Ever since you've been a puppy
All your bitches 'been unlucky"

I thought that was a really nice lyric in the right place!

Way to go!

[Paulski]

Tony - many thanks for the +tive comments - so glad it worked for you

MinuteSekunde - yeah and that's the "rudest" part too    - thanks for the nice comments!

Cheers guys
Paul

[Bleedin Boy]

I think the chorus would really work as a metal song. I like how the you out bad dog at the end of the last verse, it sets it up nicely for the chorus.

[Vintage54]

         Hey Paulski
              Dont be a shrinking violet, its not often we hear from you. Epithany and Minute found my fav lines, so i wont repeat. Youre pretty smart, and i like this. But do me a favour and slow down, cant keep up with you man. Or should i say, "Bad dog, Sit" but you know im only fooling. Hope inspiration doesn't wander off, power to your elbow. Respect!

[Paulski]

@Bleedin Boy

Thanks for the nice comments.

@Vintage54

Yeah - OK OK I'll go to the corner and sit for a while haha. But for the record, it wasn't me that bumped this old thread... Thanks for commenting!

[jonpromos]

I don't know if you guys noticed
The rhymes placed in between
The ends of lines and the ways
he rhymes just like a king
Anyways, i'm new here
I'm not looking to pick a fight
I could be a challenger
who keeps you up at night