[AnnaLina]

Hey guys, just wrote this song. Let me know what you think! Can't really seem to come up with a good name for it either, I thought of calling it "Drunk", but that just sound more like a party song to me. For now I've called it "Headaches" but feel free to suggest something else!

Over and over again
Down this bottle for help
But time after time
There's just none to find

I'm so hungover from life
know these headaches better than my mind
but lately, I swear I will try
baby, just hold on for tonight

Cause my head hurts
but my heart's worse
Just give me a chance
I'll fix it, after this dance

But I feel drunk, when I sing this
Cause it wont make sense, cause we don't

I wake up like I'm dead
You're sitting on the bed
Don't tell me though
I already know

Got so drunk that I couldn't speak
Guess the Jack just spoke for me
Told you things I didn't mean
Now you no longer speak to me

And my head hurts
but my heart's worse
Just need one more chance
After one last dance

And I feel drunk, when I sing this
Cause it won't make sense, cause we don't

Baby, baby , please
If I feel it, aint it real?
Ooh Ooh baby please
No, dont you leave

Am I drunk, when I sing this?
Cause it don't make sense, cause we don't
 
My head hurts
My heart's worse
You said no more chances
And I'm still here dancing
noooo, baby no

So danm drunk, when I sing this
It won't make sense, cause we don't

[Darren1664]

Hi Anna

I think these are good lyrics! It sticks to the theme throughout...I don't have anything to suggest as improvements as I like it as it is!

In terms of the title I think I'd centre on either the line about chance or dance as it seems to me that the singer here is trying for another chance to make it work....so something like 'Last dance' but I'm not sold on that...just an idea for you!

But yes it's a good write

Take care

Darren

[hardtwistmusic]

A suggestion that you can keep if you like it, and discard if you don't. 

I would add two lines the the chorus (or make it a very short bridge.) 

"These Headaches and heartaches
are destroying this romance."  (or words to that effect) 

That gets you a title (Headaches and Heartaches) and adds a little more length to the chorus. 

[PaulyX]

Really like the way you avoid obvious rhymes in the first verse (just half rhymes) until you get to the chorus where you go into clearer couplets - I think that will establish good structural rhythm and help the chorus zing.  Also liked the inversion around "guess the Jack just spoke for me... now you no longer speak to me", that's very neat.  I also liked Hardtwist's title suggestion - has more poetry in it than just the single word "Headaches". I wondered if you could do something with "glass half empty" / "glass half full" wordplay (if you're looking for another verse!).