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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: JHoos on January 09, 2017, 06:44:59 PM
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Hi,
I've just recently finished the following song with a band (the signal fires) I play with. Its called enemy:
Keen on any feedback. Lyrics as below.
Many thanks
John
V1
Dont you know, I'm growin tired of chemical, high and lows, you gotta give me something,
so I can cope, the situation spirals, from my control
Ch
And could you be, my enemy, And could you be
V2
Dont you know, I'm sick and tired of lying, so alone, you ask me questions that I,
just dont know, you wanna take me on here, yes or no
M8
I got all I need, buried in my sole, if I could only find my way in,
And I got all I want, I want to take control, If I could only loose myself in you
V3
Dont you know, I've had emotional, highs and lows, lay me somewhere I can, rest my bones,
the situation spirals, from my control
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Well put together and well produced. Is this a studio recording ? Like your use of harmonies and acoustic guitar sounds great
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Well put together and well produced. Is this a studio recording ? Like your use of harmonies and acoustic guitar sounds great
What He Said - LOL
I think the harmonies make the song.
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Yo JHoos.
A great moody epic of a song. Very tastefully executed. I love the use of sustain and feedback on the guitars to create that bit of tension.
I'd say a lot of work went into making this song work.
Very enjoyable,ta for posting.