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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: pompeyjazz on January 19, 2024, 05:40:56 PM
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Another genre jumping experiment from me. Mainly synth based with a bit of guitar thrown in there for good measure. Playing about with some 808 sounds to enhance the soundscape too. Hope you enjoy the listen :)
Mister Unpredictable
V1
He swings left, he veers right
He hold all the cards but never gets it right
He's so straight, but just wait
Till the scandal gets hold of him overnight
V2
He's made plans, just for you
Now you'll see, just what he can do
But it's all, just a game
That he plays with your brain
Ch
Do you want try ? Mr Un-predicatable ?
Are you going to buy, high up in the sky
Mister Un-Pre-dicatable
V3
He's got power, he's got fame
But he's got no-one to blame
And it's all in his hands
Cos it's just a big game
Ch
Do you want try ? Mr Un-predicatable ?
Are you going to buy, high up in the sky
Mister Un-Pre-dicatable
Rpt V1
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Genre jumping is just great for me. I hear your signature style but I hear blues strongly and some unusual intervals on the last line of each chorus. I love hearing surprising melody. Vocal is amazing.
My last listen of the evening and a great way to wrap the session up.
Cheers - John.
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Thanks so much @Whiskey Club (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=23120) :)
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Ooh this fun
Strange sounds in there.
Lots of guts in the vocals
Guitar is nice, too.
Was the vocal in one take?
Sounds like you had some fun 😉
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Such a groove, I was moving my head to the beat the entire time, specially between the verses.
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@rightly (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20219) Thanks ! Yep, just messing really. 95% of my vocal takes are first takes, as long as I warm up properly !
@Theresa (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=23147) Thank you so much. I’m glad that you got into the groove as that was what this song was all about 😀
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John @pompeyJazz, your development as a producer, songwriter and vocalist is off the scale. I can't help but admire your passion, skill and creative output. This sounds ace!
Brilliant!
Paul
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genre jumping is good
Another good song mister P
Your doing great on productions my man
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@Wicked Deeds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22987) Paul, thank you so much indeed. I love making music, it’s in my heart, it always will be. I just try and make the best of the resources that I have. Always great to hear from you
@Elvis Nash (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22812) Really appreciate the listen and feedback Elvis. I’ve got a lot more genres to discover !
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@rightly (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20219) Thanks ! Yep, just messing really. 95% of my vocal takes are first takes, as long as I warm up properly !
@Theresa (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=23147) Thank you so much. I’m glad that you got into the groove as that was what this song was all about 😀
Ah OK
Very good.
I've been experiencing self doubt with my vocals of late.
I used to be all gung ho
That last song, the wonder...
Is an old one but new production
I felt like I was covering myself.
Same as the one I'm almost done with now.
Doubt can be useful for me, I struggling with it.
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Nice one, @pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269) John.
Spreading your wings in terms of production techniques is always rewarding, especially when you pull it off like you have done here.
There's a timing thing with the bass that doesn't sit right with me. It's not wrong as such, just a double note which sticks out.
I like it when you go for the vocals. Your voice breaks into a great 'rasp' just at the right time.
Keep on keeping on. I think you've inspired me to be a bit more adventurous myself :)
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Hi
Great genre jump over
i get a duran duran vibe on the vocals & they sound great
you are a adventurist & i think this is a great way to unlock your many talents
well done
subvibe
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Fearless as always John! Genre jumping is not something I'm too good at but you do it with the style here. The vocal is very you but the backing has a current feel to it. I enjoyed this one. :)
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The vocal at 3:37 sounds strange - 2 vocal clips not fitting well together? With that nit-pick out of the way, another great track; loving the bass, especially the rumbly bit, and lots of other interesting things going on. Nice one.
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Not exactly my cup of tea but nicely done, still ;)
What doesn't work for me are the aggressive vocals in the verses but otherwise...
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That was fun! I admire your ability to jump from genre to genre. I try but seldom manage to get outside the sixties/folkish style, so I am envious. No nits.
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That's quite genre jump from whatever genre you were on last time John mate, you never fail to amaze!