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Running Away (Song in Progress) - Opinions on my lyrics so far would be liked :)

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« on: January 22, 2012, 03:04:29 AM »
Everyday, nothing is ever new
Looking for an answer overdue
I'm just the same as ever
Just hoping for a change
Wanting something to exchange
I feel nothing whatsoever

Maybe I can change my mind,
Maybe I can change my way
Maybe I can start to find
The reason for my delay

So, I can't keep this any more
I have nothing left to account for
I'm holding on with all my heart
Taking the chances to restart
I'm losing grip, slowly fading away
Losing sight of the words I say
I'm searching for the way
I'm tired of running away

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« Reply #1 on: January 22, 2012, 03:48:21 AM »
The second verse (I'm assuming this is verse/chorus/verse so far) seems better than the first to me. I wouldn't say that anything about this stands out. There's no clever metaphors or other linguistic spins so it's saying a lot of what other songs say in fairly similar words.

The positive thing about it I found though was that it was easy to fit to a rhythm so it would be very adaptable and could work with almost any sound.
What is the intended sound though?
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« Reply #2 on: January 22, 2012, 11:08:56 AM »
It's Verse/Bridge/Chorus so far :)

The sound/music I have in my mind is rather slow and most likely used with piano chord progression