"Falling Into Pieces Of Broken Hearts..."

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HeyYou

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« on: November 03, 2014, 09:16:42 PM »
Hey I just wanna know what you think about this song which I actually finished writing it three days ago..
So I'd love to see your comments guys :)

The broken hearts
Baby mine was there too with all the rest
Don't you have any feelings?
Don't you think I'm human too?

All your lies, my tears
All your cheats, my pain
My love, your game
My heart, your toy

Chorus:

I'm falling into pieces of broken hearts
Baby I lost my heart for you
And all I've ever done for you was my best
But you always made it worst
Now I'm falling into pieces of broken hearts...

I tried to escape away from my feelings
And leave you behind me
I tried to understand that baby I can't hurt myself anymore
But I figured it out too late and you hurt me so bad

Chorus:

And now I'm falling into pieces of broken hearts
Baby I lost my heart for you
And all I've ever done for you was my best
But you always made it worst
Now I'm falling into pieces of broken hearts...

Rolling into my pain
Baby I can't find myself
Rolling into my tears
Baby I'm drowning

Chorus:

And now I'm falling into pieces of broken hearts
Baby I lost my heart for you
And all I've ever done for you was my best
But you always made it worst
Now I'm falling into pieces of broken hearts...
« Last Edit: November 03, 2014, 09:39:35 PM by HeyYou »

Bleedin Boy

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« Reply #1 on: November 04, 2014, 07:43:31 PM »
A great title. I like how the chorus is dovetailed by the first and last line. Maybe structurally for me it doesn't flow as well maybe because there are some short lines and some more lengthier ones. I like the questions at the beginning of the song, it sets the rest of the song up nicely.