Firstly, I'm a little confused with the rhyming pattern in the verses- were you aware that it varies? Maybe it's just me, or how you intended it to read, but I find it slightly confusing when there isn't a consistent pattern.
On a higher note, I like the chorus, (even though I don't know what bewail means) especially the last line and the first verse is pretty good. I get what you mean about verse 3- I'm pretty unsure on it too. Maybe it could be turned into a bridge opposed to a verse?
Anyway, although I don't think this is your best set of lyrics, I still like them and hope my comments help