Hi Paul,
I really enjoyed this one!
Loved the lyrics! You told a great story that kept my interest.
The music was solid and your vocal delivery was excellent.
The hardest thing to do is deliver a new song vocally but you did it justice!
The only thing here that i would look at is a structure thing. From the moment it began i was hooked, A great build up
and then just as we get to the chorus the song goes somewhere else?
You wander off to a solo kinda thing. Like i said it is a structure thing. IMO It was begging to hit the chorus at that point so i would go to the chorus and put the solo part just after it before going back to your verses. I wanted the resolution after such a great build up but you didn't give it to me at that point which left me wondering why are we here and not in the chorus?
It's a minor detail and it's all subjective for sure.
Either way you take this song it still works.
Great song with great lyrics and a solid beat.
Keep em coming! You write from the heart which is something i am into big time so congratulations on another fine song.
Johnny