[benjo]

 wrote this with my daughter in mind
 love to hear any comments thanks guys
    

      

   SUMMER IN HER EYES
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 first breath of a new born baby
 first healthy cry
 that feeling deep inside you
 she's got summer in her eyes

 all the flowers are blooming
 not a cloud in the sky
 bird song so deafening
 she's got summer in her eyes
 she's got summer in her eyes

 lullaby the first time sung
 cradle precious life so young
 tiny fingers hold on tight
 first kiss goodnight
 first kiss goodnight

 diamonds on the water
 landscape makes you sigh
 breathe in all it's beauty
 she's got summer in her eyes
 she's got summer in her eyes

 watching her breathing
 seeing her smile while she sleeps
 tears welling in your eyes
 you're in love
 you're in love
 and it's so deep
 
 the first morning light
 heart filled up with pride
 that feeling of butterflies
 she's got summer in her eyes
 she's got summer in her eyes

 cuddled up so close
 first morning cry
 screwed up button nose
 she's got summer in her eyes
 she's got summer in her eyes...

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[Jess]

I read the first line and was like "this is going to be intensely cheesy" and I continued reading and realised how wrong I was! This is such a beautiful song and the hook is so original. Normally I would criticise about there not being a really dominant structure but this just totally works, can't wait to read more of your work

[GTB]

Hi Benjo, this felt spot on as a piece of poetry in it's own right, I could imagine a professional actor reading it.  Personally, I would find it difficult to put music to it, but then I like guitar solos ;-)
Beautifully written.
GTB

[Sing4me88]

First thing about this that struck me was the title; great, original and intriguing. I really like the repeat of the title line throughout as the hook. I get an Ed Sheeran love song (I know this is a love song of sorts but not a love song per se; its a Dad's love for their wee girl!) vibe from these as a read. I think a nice acoustic track would make a belting match for these great lyrics.

[cena69]

really good it caught my attention straight away i am proper jelous,
that they are your lyrics not mine.
i cannot critisise it as i thought it was really strong in my mind

tommy

[Dead Weight]

Hello Benjo.

I got to say this so simple and beautiful. It truly captures that unconditional love of a parent.

You soon forget the sleep deprivation, soiled nappies and food stains everywhere! 

[benjo]

hi dead weight,

ha ha you certanly do
thanks for lovely comments
glad you liked it take care...