Hello. This is the first song I put on here and I would appreciate any and all feedback.
I never got any feedback on my stuff so if you tell me what you thought honestly, what's good whether lyrically or melody wise, what could be better, and what's bad, I would owe you a lot! Like just whatever you think, if I have potential or not, if I'm ready to do open mics or not, that kinda thing. Thank you in advance!
https://soundcloud.com/adamjosephwolf/if-a-mountain-crashedLyrics
if a mountain crashed one day
it would turn to dust
I'm making do with what I have
and maybe it's not much
it was my time to break free
but i guess you lied to me
I don't know why it's so easy
for you to forget about me
for so long I've been alone, i can feel the loneliness
catching up with me
I pulled the knife out on my own, but I confessed
that it's killing me
I'll go back in time
wipe that smile off my face
see how I sleep tonight
knowing my fate
smash this mirror say I'm done
I've had enough with looking away
I didn't always need someone
but what doesn't kill you is bound to win one day
for so long I've been alone I can feel the loneliness
catching up with me
I pulled the knife out on my own but I confessed
that it's killing me
if a mountain crashed one day
it would turn to dust
I'm making do with what I have
and maybe it's not muchI don't have a lot of skill in the guitar playing or any sort of music production so as much as ideas of how that would benefit the song would be highly appreciated, it's not something I can do at the moment.