Title: Either "How can you love me?" or "Bury me"
https://soundcloud.com/break_thru/how-can-you-love-me/s-JuuvtYour help and input is much appreciated!!
Why did you write your song?
About a narcissistic lover and certain other people driving me crazy, but wanting the song to still be a fun to kind of imply that despite these people, we are still rocking. Having this sense that part of the problem is the lack of legitimate love they feel for themselves being reflected in their lack of love for others
What are your aims for your song?
Enjoyment by others, possibly used as a single for an upcoming album release, live performance.
What aspects of your song are you looking for comments about?
Structure, use of sounds, dynamics/energy, lyrics, anything that might improve it.
The song hasn’t been mixed by a pro yet (will be in the near future), so comments about levels/eq/compression aren’t as useful yet, but definitely welcome.
Lyrics:
Verse 1
Bury me in feelings for yourself
Bury me in a shallow grave
Bury me in feelings for yourself
Bury me in a shallow grave
Chorus 1
Should have known I’ve had enough
Of your lying cheating ways
Should have known I’ve had enough
Of your lying cheating ways
Verse 2
How can you love me when you do not love yourself
How can you love me when your heart is all you love
How can you love me with your heart the animal
How can you love me watch you rise above love
Chorus 2 and 3
Same as chorus 1