Hi
So I am a singer-songwriter and I play in a small band (myself and a pianist, I sing and play guitar). We are about to take a set of around 10 original songs live and are currently finishing them off and refining what we have.
This song is my favourite. It is relatively new in the writing process but I feel quite strongly about it and it has gone straight into our live set. We are keen to record soon and I have high hopes for this song making it (in a more complete form) onto an EP of 3 or 4 songs.
It would be great to receive feedback on the song, the lyrics in particular and also my voice, as I have battles with myself as to how to perform the songs and whether or not to sing at all. I am my own worst critic I suppose. Personally I feel that the chorus (of sorts) returns one too many times but let's see what you all think. Thanks for listening in advance and sorry for the poor quality. We have no money to record well until we book studio time so this is simply a phone recording job. Thanks
Speak loud, keep your voice down
Hard luck, keep your spirits up
Speak loud, keep your voice down
Hard luck, hard luck
Don't know where you come from
Don't know where you go
Can't explain the driving rain
Or freezing winter snow
Keep walking south, until you see the sun
It's warmer when you're near and it's colder when you're gone
Freezing breath at early dawn til shudders in the night
Broken path through nettles, torn
In search of morning light
Weighed down by the things you've said and done
It's warmer when you're near and it's colder when you're gone
Speak loud, keep your voice down
Hard luck, keep your spirits up
Speak loud, keep your voice down
Hard luck, hard luck
If you can feel it, standing in the sun
A sliver of light, you are the lucky one
The days are getting shorter, the evening comes to soon
So make love and dance in the warmth of the afternoon
Speak loud, keep your voice down
Hard luck , keep your spirits up
Speak loud, they won't hear you now
So far down
So far down
It's warmer when you're near and it's colder when you're gone
It's warmer when you are near and it's colder when you're gone.