[benjo]

 HEY GUYS
 
                      this is a love break that this person is regretting in a big way

                                          



        DON'T LET IT BE OVER
     ------ = = ------ = = ------
 

 I hear the rain fall
 soft on the window
 I hear the rain fall
 it's deep in my heart

 I'm lost in a feeling
 alone in my thoughts
 waiting and hoping
 you're going to call

 don't let it be over
 we both said too much
 I'm already sorry
 and missing your touch
 don't let it be over
 just pick up your phone
 send me a message
 say you're coming home

 don't let it be over
 don't let it be over

 I hear the rain fall
 soft on the window
 I hear the rain fall
 I'm thinking of you

 I'm hurt that I hurt you
 the most painful emotion
 all this heartache for what
 silly jealous explosions

 don't let it be over
 we both said too much
 I'm already sorry
 and missing your touch
 don't let it be over
 just pick up your phone
 send me a message
 say you're coming home

 don't let it be over
 don't let it be over

 don't let it be over
 we both said too much
 I'm already sorry
 and missing your touch
 don't let it be over
 just pick up your phone
 send me a message
 say you're coming home

 don't let it be over
 don't let it be over
 don't let it be over
 don't let it be over

 I hear the rain fall


 © copyright house all rights reserved

 

[Jane99]

Those lyrics flow verry well. But i think they are a quite long? and in the vers i would delete the second 'I hear the rain fall' or at least have it sang just in the background. But feel free to ignore me

[HeyYou]

I actually loved it..
This flows well...
The lyrics are nice.. Good job..

[Paulski]

Another good one Tony. I'm hearing Jim Reeves "He'll Have To Go"
Love the repetition and the chorus is rock solid.

No nits from me - it's good to go!
Paul

[Vintage54]

           Benjo
             This runs smooth and rolls along nicely until

                Im hurt that i hurt you
                The most painful emotion
                All the heartache for what
                Silly jealous explosions

             This is a bump in the road for me, particularly the last line, which i dont much care for.
             How about something like this

                I hear the rain fall
                Soft on the window
                I hear the rain fall
                I'm thinking of you

                I'm hurt that i hurt you
                My thoughtless explosion
                Came without thinking
                And broke us in two.

           That's only a suggestion, if you like it, use it. If you don't, thats ok.
           Like the rest of the song though.

                             Vintage54



               

[robw]

not r eally qualified to comment but... do like this, maybe the change in the above posts just tweak it in the right direction but a solid startig point... can imagine a lot of genres for this lyric...

[Hugozhor]

Great lyric. I like it its flow and nice rhymes and melody.

Great one!

[benjo]

 HEY GUYS

 THANKS FOR THE GREAT FEED BACK AND COMMENTS


 JANE99, HEYYOU, PAULSKI, VINTAGE54, ROBW, HUGOZHOR,

    I'LL TAKE IN ALL THE ADVICE GIVEN

         CHEERS GUYS


                  tony