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Songwriter Forum => Lyrics => Topic started by: Vintage54 on February 28, 2015, 11:43:23 PM
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Hope i'm not posting too often, don't want to become a nuisance, or overstep the mark.
Slap my wrist, if that's the case.
Critches
See the drunks in the downtown bars
Holding tight to their whisky jars
See them rolling through the night
Two steps wrong and one step right
They must have a reason, why they drink their lives away
And who am i to tell them, how to make it through the day
I take a drink myself, though i don't drink too much
But who knows, one day, i might lean upon that crutch
See the homeless beggar on the street
Looking for a coin or a bite to eat
See the desperation in his eye
Hoping to catch some kindness passing by
There must be a reason, why he aint got a roof
But i'm not gonna guess, or judge, cos i don't know the truth
Iv'e been close to begging, when i aint had too much
And who knows, one day, i might lean upon that crutch
See the hopeless junkie coming down
Craving more of the golden brown
From his friends and family he would steal
Long as he can make another deal
There must be a reason, why he jumped into that flame
Call it self inflicted, but it aint just him to blame
Iv'e taken drugs myself, but the hard stuff i don't touch
But who knows, one day, i might lean upon that crutch
See the congregation in the sunday pews
Holding on to the gospel news
See them down on bended knee
Putting faith in a god that they can't see
They must have a reason, why they worship as they do
And who am i to criticise, or to tell them it aint true
I turn to God sometimes, but i don't prey too much
But who knows, one day, i might lean upon that crutch.
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Just read back, and noticed the spelling mistakes, the title, and "pray" Sorry bout that, been that kind of day, and too much chardonnay.
Vintage54
"Critches" find that in the dictionary.
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No limitations on posting for lyrics as far as I know. The quality on this one is good, and it's a really interesting subject, handled with respect and courage. I liked this a lot.
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Yeah Vintage - love a lyric with a great message and this one doesn't get the least bit preachy!
Too many out there rushing to judge others - been guilty of that myself too many times.
Excellent write here - there are a few spots here the singer will have to wedge words in but hey, he can't complain all he has to do it sing it.
Paul
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HEY VINTAGE
when i clicked on this i though man that looks like a big write
and man it is a big write in the sense of quality
a really great piece to read loads of respect shown in this
and you're forgiven the odd spelling mistake we all make em
this was a cracker all round
thanks for sharing
tony
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Hi Vintage,
Another fine write. You seem to have got the hang of this!
Empathetic feel to this. I suppose alot of people use that last 'crutch' you mention i.e. religion to overcome the other three to some extent.
'Two steps wrong and one step right' most of us have been there!
Phil.
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Hi vintage,
it's another one that keeps you captivated from
start to finish,i had a nice beat going in my head as i was
reading it,superb,
tom.
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Vintage,
Enjoyed the typos ;D great opening lines and they keep on coming.
And I liked the ambiguity of the closing lines, is he in denial, who knows.
:)
Neil