Lol. Wordgate. Made me chuckle. I feel heartened that people are so caring about such small details. There is much love here
The words were choosen because they said what I wanted to say in a pleasant sounding way. Simple. There is no arrogance here
"Defend thyself from thine decay" is me saying "Be careful of the imminent fall I can see you are at risk of, by acting the way you are during these recent days"...
"Defend YOURself from YOUR decay" didn't ring correctly; the TH sounds had a bite to them that sounded great to project so I went with them. The aged words gave them a feel that I liked against the single note melody at that part in the song, almost reminiscent of my choir boy days... Psalms and plainsong.... A certain "chant" like feel that went with the line.
"Forsooth we incompatible" :
In stanza One I ask "yet if we incompatible".This was originally "for if...". I changed it at the recording session as the "Yet" gave me a hard "T" sound to separate the two words, which cut better when recording.
With the final line of the song I have decided in my mind that "Indeed we are Incompatible". As such, "For if/Yet if" turned to "forsooth". One syllable change to switch my stance, a word trick.
I knew it wasn't a commonly used word, but it is in my vocabulary, so I used it. I had no idea it would be a controversial, tis but a word.
I enjoy all poetry, whether that be Shakespeare or Eminem. The more words the better. The is no arrogance or showing off, just a love of words and word play.
Here is a line from a song I am writing at the moment. I think it is clever word play again: But NOW I am concerned that the word itself will be disliked?!?
"Naysayers brush right past you / Naysaying that they're bored"
Is "naysayers" past it sell by date?
Perhaps I should use "player-haters" instead
I is so street