I really liked the energy and drive of this from the off.
You kind of remind me of me when I was a youngster...and I don't mean that as an insult. I'm not sure if you'll even be around long enough to see this reply...but if you are...you maybe should stick around the forum and get on the journey...
It works, man. Everything can work...you just have to believe in yourself and don't let any fucker drag you down.
I've had 40 years of writing songs and have loved it, despite all the downs and further downs.
I write some great songs and I write some real twaddle as well.
That's what they all do..The Jam, Clash, Smiths, Cure, Kinks, Beatles, etc...they're just human beings and are fallible...
Go for it...but you have to be willing to give and take..and not just naff off when you feel that most people don't "get" what you're about.