Hi Vicki,
Nice to hear something a little experimental from you. I thought the drum/cymbal was too much - it really started to annoy me very quickly but other than that, I liked the sound palette you chose. It's not a scary track - there is no menace as such but this approach is more unsettling in a strange way. I could do with the vocals much further up in the mix and as others have said, some effects to add some grit and threat.
Nice one
M