@bigFishAndTheSmallPondets - love the beginning, love your voice, love the super dirty guitars and super clean vocal.
As others have said, 2xBVox, raunchy bass and a balls out drum kit...Watch those popping 'P's (I know a Person...) you might invest in a pop filter, or aim your vocal just off mic, and you'll be fine.
Maybe try this..
You could double track the LVox, this gives a depth - don't just copy the track that doesn't work.
Oooh's in the Choruses - these are generally the easiest way tho thinken out chr's
Choose a hooky line from the verse and uses that through the chorus sung in harmony.
The drums can be reined in with some EQ and compression, and touch of room reverb, but not much at all.
The bass sgould be easy enough to bring to the fore...
It's all there (apart from the extra vocals)
Hope this helps PikeMan
A blimmin good song.
Give us more.....