Hi Jenna,
Really like this, the opening line grabbed my attention and made me want to continue. I wasn't disappointed, such a good write. I like the thee line verse format and the four line chorus. It has an emotional quality that transfers to the reader (this one at least) and makes you feel the loneliness of the speaker. That's what a song should do, and in that respect, this is a winner.
Thumbs up
Vintage54