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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: HiHaaT on September 19, 2010, 02:29:23 PM
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Hey, im new here and new to songwriting so i joined up to get some advice on writing lyrics to turn into songs ;)
I have only been doing it for about 2-3week and have wrote 14 songs so far but this one is around the 4th one i did so im looking for some C&C, Thanks :)
Walkin With The Devil
Verse
I don't know whether im breathing,
Maybe im just self-deceving,
The rush that flows through me,
It Sends me into the red mist,
As i try to believe i exist
Chorus
Im takin a walk with the Devil,
A one way ticket to hell
Feeling it slipping Away
Perceiving a life of Misery
It's leading me astray
Im Knockin on The Devils Door
Verse
The horizon is slippin away,
Livin on the edge of insanity,
Dont know whether to believe whats in front of me,
Im Seeing a million differnt shades,
The pin has been pulled on the grenade,
Thats about to send me to the place i once knew
A World of peace and sanity.
Chorus
Im takin a walk with the Devil,
A one way ticket to hell
Feeling it slipping Away
Perceiving a life of Misery
It's leading me astray
Im Knockin on The Devils Door
Verse
The colour has been faded from my eyes,
Sweating As My blood...
beings to rise,
Im hanging off the edge,
With a life of regret,
Insanity has depleted my soul
This hellride has taken it's toll.
I cant see whats right or wrong,
I Dont know where i belong...
Chorus
Im takin a walk with the Devil,
A one way ticket to hell
Feeling it slipping Away
Perceiving a life of Misery
It's leading me astray
Im Knockin on The Devils Door
Bridge
Outro
Im Just splippin away
From Sanity
Just Slippin away from what ive known
It's Crashing Down on me
I cant see through the mist
As i try to flee
Insanity has taken over me
Chorus
Im takin a walk with the Devil,
A one way ticket to hell
Feeling it slipping Away
Perceiving a life of Misery
It's leading me astray
Im Knockin on The Devils Door