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Title: perforated nights
Post by: rightly on May 26, 2020, 09:29:17 PM

well this is my latest
I like it
the music is a bit too much blues progression
but after learning how to play it I think I'll really enjoy it

I think it's a bit of a love song or monologue to my muse
I think I'm just saying these surprise visits are alright


perforated nights

I just don't know. what would I do?
if ever I lost the will to deliver
the very best to you
and I don't care. that's what they'd say
never one to follow the river
'less it runs my way
and it's all true
I'd only run, skip and jump for you

well okay, it's alright
bring on them perforated nights

'house and garden, a dirty doting wife
we'll knuckle down when things get hard and
we'd live a tin-foil life
is that too much, or not enough?
better men sucumb to these ashes
to ashes, dust to dust
these ruins though
hostile and barren, still belong to us

and in the heart of darkness
we'll be sure to see the light
well okay, it's alright
bring on them perforated nights



_____________

rightly
Title: Re: perforated nights
Post by: Wicked Deeds on May 27, 2020, 10:32:24 AM
@Rightly (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20219),

Great opening!  However, you keep up the pace with some very smart writing.  When I read your lyrics, I kind of expect the unexpected. You rarely tread a well worn path.  There's plenty of originality here.  Well done!

Paul
Title: Re: perforated nights
Post by: CaliaMoko on May 27, 2020, 04:22:35 PM
I like this! Although, I have no idea what "perforated nights" are.... As a whole, it meant something to me right away, and I like it. At some point you'll play it so we can hear it, right??
Title: Re: perforated nights
Post by: PaulAds on May 29, 2020, 05:58:49 PM
Fantastic stuff from the big "R"

You're a real artist.
Title: Re: perforated nights
Post by: rightly on June 03, 2020, 08:34:38 PM
I like this! Although, I have no idea what "perforated nights" are.... As a whole, it meant something to me right away, and I like it. At some point you'll play it so we can hear it, right??

Hi @CaliaMoko (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19928)
With this song I meant , was having a fictional conversation with this woman I’m interested in. But sometimes I’m addressing my muse   
I don’t want she wants or if I can provide it.
I think the song is written from a strange place.
I was never certain what perforated night means, it’s open for interpretation
The main characteristic of might is darkness
I’m a way this is broken up by events , the night sky by stars.
Perforated nights might be about the quiet life.

I don’t know if that helps. Thorough explanations will destroy the possibility of the listener to make it his own. A good song doesn’t inhibit the imagination.
Title: Re: perforated nights
Post by: CaliaMoko on June 03, 2020, 09:00:08 PM
Yeah, I really don't need to know what they are. It's very cool regardless. (Is "cool" dated??)