Hi there Marc,
I really enjoyed that. Very up to date topic and it took you little time or words to make your point.
The drowning problem is quite simple to bypass if you replace the word 'drown' by 'dive', which will bring you total immersion without death.
Musically, I think you might want to spice this a little bit up by adding a middle eight: Additional text adding a different angle or just instrumental; f.e. a guitar solo.
There is something else, which (being a parent) I didn't recognise at first, but still: Your lyrics come across as a little patronizing. A middle eight adding a slightly different point of view can break that.
Cheers,
Jeremy