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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: pompeyjazz on February 11, 2018, 12:02:28 PM
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For me, one of the most fascinating things about song writing is that you can approach songs at so many different angles and you never know what they are going to morph into. That's incredibly exciting.
This one somehow turned into a Eurovision monster, so I went with the flow, hammed it up a bit and Le voila !
Something to bounce about to on a Sunday :)
Boom Boom Boom
My heart goes Boom Boom Boom (When you're standing close to me)
Boom Boom Boom (You knock me off my feet)
Boom Boom Boom (Then the thought of ectasy)
Boom Boom Boom (You make my life complete)
When I call you on the phone
You're never on your own
It makes me sad when I am all alone
Wish that I could see you
Cos you're my dream come true
Come with me and make some fan-tas-y
My heart goes Boom Boom Boom (When you're standing close to me)
Boom Boom Boom (You knock me off my feet)
Boom Boom Boom (Then the thought of ectasy)
Boom Boom Boom (You make my life complete)
When I'm dreaming in the night
Want you to hold me tight
That's the only place I want to be
My heart it skips a beat
You knock me off my feet
Just want to spend my time with you
(c) Bradley – 2018
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Oh boy, you nailed it. It's perfect. The genre is kind of painful to me, but it's really great and made me laugh.
I can imagine the club where this is blasting. I can't imagine myself there. Haha. It would not be of my own free will. Most likely dragged there drunk on some occasion like a bachelorette party. Oy.
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Oh Boy indeed. How the heck do you do it John? Are you sure there's just one PompeyJazz? Prolific and able to jump between genres at will. This is as good as any Ibiza anthem. Just brilliant. Shame I'm sat at home on the sofa having a cup of tea. Don't think a bit of caffeine and milk does this song much justice.... Cheers Micky.
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PumpyAss iz inda hous. 8)
I like a bit of doof doof now and again,I actually did one myself last year,but didn't unleash it on the unwary! :D
Yer a genre-bender for sure,fluidly moving from one style to the next. Chameleon skillz fo sho.
Did ya get busy with the old sidechaining and everyting? Check me out yo! :D
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Nice fast beat a happy tune that makes you feel good about life and wanna dance - could lose myself dancing to this
Katie xxx
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A sudden vision of you bouncing around an a glitter festooned stage surrounded by Lycra clad dancers representing the UK in the Euro-vision song contest...(hope you've got the legs for it John) blimey! we might actually win this time.. :) :)
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Pompey, this is one of your best! Could this be the genre you were destined for? Great stuff!
Kevin
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Fluffy and dancy as anything! Love the cheesy rhymes, great fun. In the choruses maybe a bit more kick drum for a real floor shaker? But it does what it says on the tin, really good stuff.
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Just the right feel for a song of this type. The chorus is the strongest part - very memorable! (an "earworm" I think).
One minor point - the sound in places seems a little "thin" - e.g. before lats chorus - maybe need another layer of something?
A very good song - well crafted with a good hook.
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Your versatility knows no bounds!
You've got a hit on your hands here John - OK - maybe not, but you should have! I mean I can't honestly say I like it - but that is a compliment because I am an old fart who is far too old to like this genre! You have absolutely nailed that sound.
I am seriously concerned I am going to singing this all day now. Damn!!
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John,
Well that was exciting and energetic, feels just like a Friday night thingy, all pumped up.
Lots to like and no qibbles from me at all.
Get those dancing shoes on
:) :)
neil
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Dear Pompey
Got me back in the '80's you just need Kylie :)
I misheard the 'dream came true' as 'a Chicken true'
love the synth bass, really neat, which plugin did you use?
cpm
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Shame I'm sat at home on the sofa having a cup of tea. Don't think a bit of caffeine and milk does this song much justice.... Cheers Micky.
well i dropped my biscuit in my tea when this kicked off !
excellent hook- the boom .. infectious look forward to it coming round each time which is a very good sign
cant help bu play table top drums to it well i cant anyway
greart voice pompey you sing with conviction and it comes over
and because of your fine work im afraid you owe me a half a wagon wheel..
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Hey PJ ;D ;D
Another cracker.....I noticed this one when you first posted it. It was good then, even
better now ;D Don't know if anything with your voice on it could be called Eurovision
though ;D
Love it mate ;D
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Made the mistake of listening right before bedtime.
Now I'm all wired up like I been clubbin all evening ;D
Fun track fo sho - but please, disco - don't come back!!
Paul
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Hi John, well you nailed the genre! Eurovision is something I avoid like the plague, so i can't get too enthusiastic about this type of music, but I can admire your ability to 'pull it off' (ooh errr missus).
Nice one!
Cheers
Jamie
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Hi,
I loved it! ;)
You can clearly hear in the song that you are loving this creative process that we call songwriting. :)
With it being an upbeat dance track i would look at the FX on your vocals. The autotune FX is fine. What I am talking about here is reverb and delay. Because it is a fast beat you should use shorter reverb and delay FX's as this will help your vocal to be heard and stand out in the mix better. Also a neat trick for your vocal is to sing it 2 more times and to sit those vocals way back in the mix. It will warm up your lead vocal 100%. It's a trick the pro's use to make vocals stand out eg: in the chorus for example.
Keep up the great work.
Johnny :)
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Quite a surprise to hear this. I admire your willingness to embrace a different musical genre. I guess it's ideal for pitching to other artists - it's definitely instantly catchy. Makes me want to deviate from the music I know and live next time so sit down to write.
Cool stuff!
Paul
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I'm with Jamie. I really shouldn't like this at all - it goes against all my principles but I can't bloody help but admire it. After you'd done it, did it make you think less of the people who make this and nothing else for a living or did you think "This isn't so easy after all"? I always think of this type of music as lowest common denominator, mindless, conveyor belt pop but it's effective when done well and this done very well indeed.
M
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Thanks so much for all the reviews on this song. This WAS VERY tongue in cheek and not at all serious so quite amazed as to how many play's it's had.
Good points raised. No, I don't particularly like the genre but this song started off with some free samples from Computer Music magazine and just morphed into what it was.
I would say that I found it generally easier to do that other songs I've done, this was about 3 hour work max.
It was fun and sometimes it's interesting to do that so you can come back with some more ideas.
Cheers all :)
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My opinion is not very relevant cause Im not a musician but the rules of the Forum say i should comment so here we go: I like your playing with words “You're never on your own/It makes me sad when I am all alone”, really nice. Not my style but Im pretty sure it is good for the genre. Congrats
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Not my genre either :) But you've gotta try something different every now and again peut etres? Thanks for the comments they really are appreciated
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I think it is a great idea to stretch yourself into other genres as a songwriter- and this is definitely an admirable sailing into alien waters for you. Loads of fun and interesting how you've analysed and recreated some of the hooks for this genre without it being your own, which shows a skilled writers instinct at work. Well done, I say! (Plus made me laugh re the number of plays - maybe you are genuinely onto something! ;D )