[k8he]

Well...
Thank you for the last feedback.
I tried to use metaphors and other things...but i dont think im good at it.
Let me know what you think about my songlyrics

Verse 1:
Love is something you fall into,
there's no choice that you can choose.
But there's also no guarantee
that there won't be tears running down your cheek.

Chorus:
If you find somebody
who swears he will be
always there when you need
him.
If you find the one who will
make everything possible,
make you feel so beautiful
Then,
promise me
You will love him.

Verse 2:
Love is something you can lose,
love is a thing that can bruise.
It can come and go and be
like the sad, true reallity.

Chorus

Bridge:
Promise me,
you will give him a chance.
Or you'll never know
how your story ends.

Verse 3:
Love is butterflies flying crazy
in your stomach everytime when you see
him smiling just for you.
This is love, this is true.


I think this song is def. not one of my best...but it means a lot to me so i wanted to share it with you.

[Jess]

Yes, each one of your new posts get better, best bits for me are verses 1 and 2, thanks for taking your feedback on board and making the improvements
Maybe don't post so many songs in one go...I tend to try and only post a new song every 2 weeks, it gives other people the chance to show their songs and also gets you more comments and reviews, opposed to posting lots and not getting much feedback.