[joejohnstun]

High! This is my seventh SongwritersForum song and counting (you can listen to the others here: Fall Fall, Being Single, Cappuccino Monday, Psychosis, If I Had a Pair of You, and When You're Bad)

Back to the manic delirium and pasty whistle-alongs, here is a song that I got stuck in my head. This is a sunrise song that is supposed to cheer you up in the mornings.

I tried to keep the vocal on top in this one, as that seemed to be a common thread of critique in my other tunes. I only hope it's not over-powering. I also tried to keep a playful, live-performance vibe with lots of fun guest instruments and percussions.

What do you think - too repetitive, too delirious, too silly, too sickeningly sweet?

Thank you!


https://soundcloud.com/joejohnstun/i-have-a-song-stuck-in-my-head



I Have a Song Stuck in My Head

Playing in my brain
Skipping in my step
I have a song in my head and it goes like...

I have a tune stuck in my head
I'm working on the words
There are none yet
It's just a jumble of letters in some alphabet
I have a tune in my head and it goes like...

'Wont you come out and play?' said
The tuba to the clarinet
'The notes upon my treble clef are hung and the night is young.'
She said, 'Your low tones make me high. Let's elope to the third bar
'Put your mouth piece on mine
'And sing your song into my mind
'And it goes...'

She has a sparkle in her smile
Blazing a trail
Through the daisies that she's
Picking for the boy in the tune in the song in her head
With a sparkle in her smile

He has a girl stuck in his head
Go Romeo
Sing to silly Juliet
Oh the tune in your head and it goes like...

I have a song stuck in my head
Playing in my brain
Skipping in my step
I have a song in my head and it goes like this.

[Neil C]

Joe,
On first hearing it's not too anything and works as I imagine you intended. Vocals sat nicely, perhaps the whistles slightly too high in the mix. Enjoy the lyrics especially the middle section. I might find it repetitive after a number of plays but that simplicity of melody has lodged in my brain.
Damned Catchy
 
Neil

[Jamie]

Hi JJ, really catchy tune, and I really liked the bass line, very melodic and unusual. Great vocal too. A summer song and I could hear it in a childrens TV programme.
Nice one!
Jamie

[Dutchbeat]

ah, now that whistle melody is stuck in my head 

great song, great lyrics

cool!!!

[torgny_n]

Hello.

It's fun - no doubt about it. The whisteling is cool, spot on and well executed.
Lyrics - good. Excellent singing aswell.

My only thing is that I don't understand the drums. I Think it sounds a Little of beat sometimes.
Or "too rythmical" and not as "beat" as I'm used too... Hope you can understand a Little bit of what I mean.

It's a cool song!

//Torgny

[joejohnstun]

neil C: dammit i was worried about that whistle being too high in the mix. it's such a loud penetrating tone, it's hard to find exactly where to put it.

jamie: thanks! that bass line has a lot of love in it.

dutchbeat: yay! ur very kind.

torgny_n: yes! the drums ARE off beat, especially in the verses. i had the hi-hats and rides and even some snares hit a teeny tiny bit before the beat. the theory was that it would make the song sound more eager and playful, like a puppy. don't know if it worked or just sounded bad and off beat, but it is on purpose. what do you think, should i change that?


JJ.

[torgny_n]

torgny_n: yes! the drums ARE off beat, especially in the verses. i had the hi-hats and rides and even some snares hit a teeny tiny bit before the beat. the theory was that it would make the song sound more eager and playful, like a puppy. don't know if it worked or just sounded bad and off beat, but it is on purpose. what do you think, should i change that?


JJ.

If it was on purpose I say, keep it. You're the artist!
It's just me listening to too much Meshuggah that I've ended up as an calculator. 

Listened to it again, and it sounds as you said, playful, like a puppy!
Love your voice by the way!

/T

[Thebike]

Ah I Like!
Very playful tune and lyrics.
Great vocals and playing. Had a think bout the drums but reading reviews I see it is intentional.
Good recording, nice sound
A little Mc Cartnyish 

[joejohnstun]

torgny_n: ok, i may dial it back a little bit if it distracts from the song. thanks!

thebike: play PLAY!! thank u. so ur also bugged by the drums. yeah, i may have to look into those.


JJ.

[Paulski]

As usual your vocals are super and the lyrics fun.
I esp liked the tempo changes - tough to do in a DAW but nicely pulled off.
Would have liked a vocal break with just oooo's in the bg but I'm old school like that.
Fun piece!
Paul

[benjanet]

Super catchy as presumably intended. Should have been on the Scrubs soundtrack.

[joejohnstun]

paulski: yeah, i really didn't wanna change tempos but those periods worked so much better in those times.

benjanet: thanks!


JJ.