@tboswell - Really really liked this, I was and still am David Gates appreciator, I can dig the Bread vibe,
Maybe....some close female harmonies at the end of each second line (real lost art, and right aint that smart...later on justifying those means)
maybe keep the LVox un-pushed in the chorus, just from memory, he didn't used to let rip...did he?
Superb string arrangement, lovely acoustic gtr sound, seemed to disappear later in the song (shame), nice bar chimes to, love those.
Not sure about those semiquaver snare hits i.e.@1:30 , might have gone for a single cross stick, it's a bit distracting.
Could you bring the gorgeous Acoustic guitar in again at the end, outtro with just that?
Thanks for a lovely song
Hope this helps