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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: pompeyjazz on January 01, 2018, 08:23:28 AM
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A very Happy New Year to everybody out there in Forumland. Let's hope it's a good year for all. I'm sure we've all got a lot of musical treats to come.
I've given the guitars a rest on this one which is a piano ballad. I've had bits of this song hanging around for a while but I managed to pull it together over the last couple of weeks. My keyboard playing is still poor but I have been practicing :)
It's a simple love song, not much more to say really :)
https://soundcloud.com/pompeyjazz/carry-the-love
Carry The Love
Carry the love
Far from above
Carry and tell me what's mine
Let me believe
What I can see
Can't have you waving goodbye
Carry the love over rough stony ground
Carry it up to the sky
Never believe what the people might say
Don't let them wave you goodbye
Carry the love
It might be tough
Hold onto love every day
Hold on be strong
It won't be long
We'll be together each day
Carry the love, every day, every night
Carry it, keep it in mind
Maybe one day when we're both far away
Love is a treasure to find
(c) Bradley – 2017
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Simple is usually the best mate!!! a fine ballad, harmonies (or double vocal)on the chorus would've been good and the vocal is a bit pitchy...no excuses John! :) just sing it until you've got it right 8) :)
why let a lovely song down?
best to for the coming year mate :) :)
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That's what I wanted to hear.
Great way to start the year, John.
Bold and simple, 4.5 minutes and never a dull moment.
Just let the ending trail out a bit, some space to reflect.
Incredible song.
Well done, and thank you.
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The appeal of this for me is the fag-smoked pompeyjazz vocal melded with the gentle ballad style of the song...and a good well thought out melody here too.
I followed that with interest 2nd time round...wasn't thinking about it first time. I didn't notice any pitchy bits if they were there either time.....wasn't listening for that either!
Might have been tempted to really go big with this towards the end maybe and really let go with the vocal?
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Some lovely touches here - that step down in the final line of the verse sounds great. Impressed with the piano if it's not your usual thing. The addition of new parts to the backing works well I think. I might have tried to avoid breaking up the words waving, treasure etc but that's just a small nit.
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Yeah, ballads man, respect is due, they aint easy to do well. This was an old style ballad and you hacked it. I dont know many guys who like 'em, but you gotta do 'em for the ladies. Fact: Ladies love ballads.
So can we extrapolate this to: Ladies love guys who do ballads? I think so.
The piano sounded like one from a bar /pub, and the whole thing had a live feel.
Yeah your female fanbase demographic has almost certainly ballooned in the female drinkers segment.
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I'm getting a 'song not found' message on Soundcloud PJ... have you taken the track down?
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Looks like Soundcloud have problems tonight
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Soundcloud seems to have recovered.
Well what a lovely track John. Some great vibrato in your voice and I like that delicate little piano motif it opens with and that you repeat a couple of times. I almost want to go and buy a lighter so I can wave it in the air when this is playing. Good contrast to your rockers.
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Yeah...I tried earlier but couldn't get to hear it...
Lovely sweet heartfelt ballad...with loads of emotion...very nicely done.
Neat piano playing too...mind you don't set fire to yer hat by getting too close to that candelabra :)
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This could have been on Imagine.
A fine song John. :)
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Bleedin' hell - you have one hell of a voice - perfect for this which reminded me of the great Harry Nilsson.
It's a simply lovely song and although you are pitchy in places, the quality of your tone carries you through (excuse the pun!).
What more can I say?
A masterpiece
M
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WOW< John :o I would never have expected a love ballad like this from you :-* Most of the tracks I've heard of yours are so 'not' love ballads, but this is really beautiful :-* it's almost got a John Lennon vibe
I love your voice in this..it's kind of fragile, which is perfect for this genre :)
The melody is gorgeous and I'm impressed by your piano playing :o
My only nit would be that it cuts off too abruptly at the end ???
Funny, but I've been working on a piano love ballad myself :)
Maybe it's time for a Valentines love song comp :-*
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Wah ! Thanks for pointing out the bit about the ending guys. Hopefully that's corrected now :)
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Really different from your normal stuff PJ.
Very accomplished and moving...as mentioned by others... a john lennon inspired classic.
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This would not be out of place on Aerial Pandemonium Ballet.
Haha, I just noticed someone else said thing about Imagine. Ironic.
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John,
Great title and message
Lyrics sound real and it has a memorable melody
Like a outtake from a John Lennon session
thanks for sharing
:)
neil
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Thank you all :)
Shadowfax - Thanks so much, you're the ballad master so I take that as a great compliment - Pitchy - yep a bit, hopefully resolved now ;)
Rightly - Gee thanks so much. I've taken your recommendation about the ending on board
Viscount - Fag-smoked vocal ? moi ??
Adam - Yes, I see what you mean on the word breaks - Midi is your best mate when your piano playing is dodgy :)
Silver - Yes, the ballad did it - My postman has refused to deliver any more fan mail :)
Paulyx - I was intending for the vocal to sound somewhat fragile - Hope that came over
PaulAds - Yep, I really did have to watch my hat and that wax makes on helluva mess
Skub - Imagine - Well you know what I think of Lennon so big thanks
Monty - Gee, thanks man. What a voice Harry Nillson had
Suzy - Thank you ! You know I like to mix it up a bit. I've sorted the ending out now
Morefrog - Cheers, you know how I like to jump genres :)
Lynn - Thank you, that's a huge compliment
NeilC - Fantastic feedback - Glad it seemed "real"
Thanks once again and see you on the next song :)