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Songwriter Forum => Competitions => Topic started by: habiTat on October 31, 2012, 04:13:58 PM
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SONG NOW ADDED, IT'S ONLY ACOUSTIC, NO TIME FOR FULL PRODUCTION, BUT I WANTED TO GET IT OUT THERE - http://soundcloud.com/habitatsongs/throw-me-the-diamonds-demo
Hi guys,
I've been stuck at home with the baby today waiting for some news on my Mum. Nothing as yet...
Anyway, inspired by Tina's effort I have written my film plot. Along with the lyrics which I already posted I now have everything except the song :(
I have it in my head but as yet I have no time or plan as to how to turn it into a recording.. ??? If only I had a USB port in my head :D
Anyway, my plot features some familiar names and I thought I'd share it. No offence intended and if I missed you out, I'm sorry. Feel free to add your character in..
Apocalypse sky
Power crazy billionaire and self appointed Professor 'Michael habiTat' is hell bent on creating a new world order. Along with his evil henchmen, the 8ft tall 'Kafla Schavautje' , a one eyed hunch back called 'Boydie Binladeda' and his crazy half sister 'Tinam Jillianne' they embark on a hair brained scheme to build and launch the 'Apocalypse Sky' codenamed 'The s-ongst-hat-cry project' This weapon is a 900 billion gigaton diamond matrix fusion cluster cloud bomb. It's planned launch from a stolen Soviet nuclear submarine (dubbed 'The Mihkay' ) would result in mass destruction for much of the western world. So returning the human race back to the stone age. habiTat will then be able to assume leadership and full control of the remaining population, land and resources in this new 'post apocalyptic' world.
And so follow instructions from 'M' to Bond to carry out the mission, codenamed 'A.N.D.Y 5544'. The aim, to prevent habiTat from installing the stolen 'Ramshackle' diamonds into the warhead at his secret lair. These diamonds have special radioactive properties and are crucial to the success of the weapon. This phenomenon is known as the NOOMS effect.
It's up to James Bond, the glamourous bond girl 'Stephanie Dema' and european agents 'Dutchbeat' and 'Flossie Misswhiterabbit' to foil his evil plan. They must find the diamonds intended for use in the weapon by using Q's ingenious diamond tracking device, known as the 'Ramshackle tone detector'. These diamonds emit a distinct radioactive 'TONE'. American agent 'Florida Mike' offers clues to the whereabouts of the diamonds and Bond's brother 'Paul', a 'fisherman' takes them to habiTat's secluded island lair in his gadget laden boat named 'The Nighthawk', to do battle.
Professor habiTat is a 'man of simple pleasures' and enjoys fine wine. He hides the diamonds in bottles of his favourite 2002 Merlot. The underground wine cellar battle ensues and our heroes take out all the henchmen one by one in lots of gruesome and mildly entertaining ways. Professor habiTat finally perishes when James finds the diamonds, throws them to Stephanie and pushes him into a vat of wine, where he slowly drowns, calling out the name of his beloved fluffy white cat 'Montydog'.
The End
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sounds like a serious script from a Bond film to me
I hope you did not give away the plot from Skyfall, Habitat
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Hehe ;D ;D...imaginative stuff..sound's like a bunch of schizophrenic's trying to take over the world.....hope they succeed, can't do any worse than the bunch we've already got ;D ;D
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haha genuis!
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This is a cool thread. It's is such an enjoyable read. I think that the Bond competition is proving to be tremendous fun!
Well done habiTat!
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Haha, I love it, hab :D
Thank you for graciously picking me as the Bond girl ;)
Can't wait to hear the sound track.
This totally made my day!
SD
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Tee hee!
I'm with Dutchbeat - you mean to say this isn't an actual bond film plot? I can't wait to hear the theme song for this :D
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omg im crazy & evil & related to a 1 eyed hunchback!! well i spose thats all your good for in the world of movies when youve passed 30 & your a woman
yes a typical bond plot ;D but such a hideous waste of diamonds putting them in some silly weapon!
i think your going to have to rewrite that ..i ll have a hatton garden jeweller help you with the script!
but no its great to step outside the narrow world of songwriting & intraduce other imaginative elements like this bond script
i do hope your mum gets some good news & also that you manage to get this finished :)
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hey man this is my film & you go writing all yer mates into it.....bloody cheek!
8)
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SONG ADDED, ACOUSTIC ONLY, NO TIME FOR MORE
HOPE YOU LIKEY...
http://soundcloud.com/habitatsongs/throw-me-the-diamonds-demo
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This is unmistakeably Bond even when presented as a guitar vocal song. on the whole it moves along very nicely. I'd make a slight change to the line "Only with someone like you can I master a plan". Perhaps changing it to "Only with you can I master the plan". It's a small change but I believe the reduced number of syllables works much better. This song would be quite spectacular with a lavish production, though I wouldn't have so many references to existing Bond titles e.g 'Nobody does it better' and 'Live and Let Die'. In my opinion it stands up extremely well as a Bond Theme without their inclusion.
Make no mistake, these are only suggestions for improvements as I can hear a first class song here that deserves just a little more attention to small details! :)
Excellent! A stunning Bond song!
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Wow this is bond thru and thru. I cant beleive how well you captured the escence of a bond production with such a steripped down production. I can hear this in my head with a full orchestra and some 60's twang guitar - real cool.
Your choice of chords and melody was the key to this interpretation of Bond, absolutely spot on. And with the lyrics I am think a 'The best of Bond' compilation DVD lol.
Kudos mate,
Allan.
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Good song hab....very easy to hear this with a full production. Good arrangement....nice choice of chords, excellent lyrics (of course)...really liked the 'out' ;D ;D Hope all is well in your world......
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yes i also think youve done very well here doing a bond song with just basic acoustic gtar & vocals
i wouldntve thought it possible & it does fit the bill & its very good
the lyrics arent the strongest bit but then as ive seen here recently given a big arrangement even the worst lyrics suddnly sound majestic
so... excellent & im realy pleased you were able to get your entry done for the bond comp :)
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Cool thanks guys, it's been in my head for ages, except with all the orchestra etc.. :D
If anyone fancies having a go at making it bigger and more bond like, let me know. I wish I had the time and experience to be able to do it..
Thanks again
Hab..
Ps. to those who are interested, my mum is home and hopefully on the mend, we're still awaiting some test results though, fingers crossed. Xx :)
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Thats some good news for you..about your mum...
Good song btw...i wouldn`t big it up..keep it simple.
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What a lovely song, Hab!
I wouldn't big it up, works perfectly as it is, doesn't really need more IMO.
A guitar and a voice, that's all you need.
Only thing I would change maybe - but that's more a matter of personal sound taste - is switch the Spanish (nylon) guitar for a folk (dreadnought) one.
But that's just because I've never quite liked the solo sound of a classical guitar.
Fav line: I've been expecting you, shaken not stirred
Very clever intertextuality :)
Glad to hear about your mom as well!
Hope the final tests also turn out ok.
SD
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Yep, getting some great bond-esque feeling here, too!
Brilliant vocals once again, with lots of beautiful and unexpected melody twists.
Wait a second... did you just post a song in 4/4 ? ;D Great to see you managed to ignore the 3/4 factory setting of yours, and you did a great job at it too!
I kind of like the bond references, but I think it's more the melody than those allusions that make this a "Bond song".
Thanks for making me part of the villain btw, we shall rule the world with an iron fist... uhm, wait... those bond villains never really live to see the credits, do they ? ;D
I do think this might work in a typical bond-song style orchestral production, but personally I wouldn't add anything cause it's great as it is!
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Wait a second... did you just post a song in 4/4 ? ;D Great to see you managed to ignore the 3/4 factory setting of yours, and you did a great job at it too!
Haha, I didn't even notice, I just did it..
Maybe it's that fact that it's strummed and not finger picked.
The less I think, the better the song tends to be.. :D
Thanks for the comments Michael and Stephanie.
btw. Stephanie, I feel the opposite re. the guitar sound, I find the steel strings are not as warm and can sound quite jangly. It's nylon for me.. all the way :) Each to their own though and thanks for the input, like you say, it's a taste thing. :)
hab..